Author's Notes:
Finally have an editor/proofreader.
DankMemez.
If you find the quality of writing/sex scenes in the chapter to be greatly improved from the last, it's mostly due to his efforts and suggestions. He has been stupendously helpful.
Special Thanks to VibrantDragon, FlyPenguin & W00tdiew00p for supporting my work
Schedule:
A couple of you asked me for a schedule. I am not a full-time author, so I can't promise you one. However, I am aiming towards releasing
one chapter every three weeks
(on an average). It may vary depending on the length of the chapter.
I love the fact that you guys are so eager to read my work, but I currently cannot go any faster. This chapter took a bit longer because Dank and I needed to get in sync with editing.
The earlier chapters were also less complex and easier to write.
Obligatory Warnings:
1. No real Pegasi were harmed in the making of this chapter. To those of you who are sensitive towards cruelty to animals, please read till the end of the scene.
2. There are two sex scenes and on Dank's suggestion, it ends with one :P.
Festivals of Azra El:
The heavenly union has many holidays and festivals but here are a few of the more important ones.
Regnbage Carnival:
Festival of costumes. Every town and city of Azra-El celebrates with a procession led by a large puppet dragon, followed by frolicking costumed angels. The festival arises from the myth of Alvira.
The story tells of an ancient tribe of angels who were invaded by a tribe of beast like beings. Alvira, a young intelligent angel devised a plan to ward off the beastlings.
The beastlings were known to worship dragons. Alvira, with the help of other young angels, created a serpent like dragon puppet made of cloth, angel feathers and wooden sticks.
For three nights after that they paraded the dragon puppet around the town, while the beastling scouts reported of a dragon serpent that prowled the angel town.
The invading chief was skeptical about a dragon protecting an angel tribe, but she couldn't cull the rumors that spread among her force. However, on the day when the beastlings attacked the tribal village, a huge multi colored dragon head with a tail of rainbow appeared at the entrance of the town, breathing down a column of raging fire. The beastlings fled without looking back.
The myth is unclear about how Alvira managed to create such a phenomenon at a time when the angels had not yet figured out the use of energy stones, but the incident had henceforth been celebrated as the Regnbage Carnival.
Sangkarn:
New Year's Day of the Heavenly kingdom. It's a day when older angels bestow their young with gifts. It's also a day of ancestral worship. The origin of the festival is dated long before the Regnbage Carnival's appearance.
Omovo:
Harvest festival of the heavenly union, marked by gift giving by the rich and a large potluck on the eve of the day.
Flight Song:
(no, not the pop song. That's fight song) A music and dance festival held in the middle of First Seed (March).
The nine primary societies of The Heavenly Union
Ophanim -- Wisdom
Erelim -- Courage
Seraphim -- Justice
Chayot -- Enlightenment
Hashmallim -- Love (including kindness and grace)
Malakim -- Beauty (including mercy and healing)
Elohim -- Valor
The last two are informal and are comprised of civil servants and the common folk.
Cherubim -- Service (civil servants)
Ishim -- Follow (common angels
Response to Comments
First of all, wow! I've been immensely moved by some of the comments. The knowledge that my writing can so deeply immerse you guys in the story and evoke some intense feelings is very inspiring. Despite the inevitable fact that my improvement is going to level off at some point, I want to keep pushing my boundaries just to keep up with your expectations. Thank you all for taking the time to express your opinions. I'd like to respond to each of your comments but since I have 18 this time, that doesn't seem advisable. Please don't let it keep you from posting a comment. I need em! I will use the Q&A at the end of the chapter to address some of your Q's.
James7594
: That was quite the amazing/accurate review. I wish I could post it where more people can see it.
Fight Scenes- Not every chapter will have them, but I will try my best to make them as good or better than the one in the last chapter.
Sex Scenes- I agree with you, but I am not sure how to improve. I have only read one erotica (a few years back) and with the novel occupying most of my free time, I don't have the freedom to read more for
research
. I could really use some elaborate advice, if you're willing to give it.
Story/Plot- This has always been my strongest aspect. Not my writing but my imagination. I am glad I've lived up to it.
Characters- As you've said, instead of giving a big concrete character description, I have tried to imagine a personality and see how it reacts to situations. This seems to have worked so far.
Rating: Best Sci/Fi stories you've read -- Let me try make that a reality (I've unseen the 'One of' part).
Wankr65
: Don't know about foot jobs but I could work with tasteful femdom. I was thinking of writing it with Fiora but I didn't know how to keep Blaze in character. It's easily done with the demons (I may already have a scene) but that's some ways off. Let's see. Maybe I will get a bright idea.
RanceSama
: Your excitement is so freaking contagious and the way you think is hilarious. I enjoyed reading your whole spiel and that COD reference.
You've also given me the idea of a costumed scene อกโ อส อกโ. Also, snow is rare in Aranya (the country) but I am sure Blaze will go somewhere he can personally use that quote.
Drastic Explorer:
I've always implied that the angel society is not as utopian as it seems. As for Uriel, I've given a few hints in chapter 5 about why she might be that way. She is a Malakim is the obvious hint.
Finbar: Uriel being fired also has something to do with Fiora waiting for a chance to do so, as her conversation with Alice hints. I will consider your other suggestions and improvements.
ReaderFic: I dream about it too :P. He uses a two-handed weapon in a scene that was moved to the next chapter.
Enjoy the chapter.
Chapter 11
Middas (Monday) was a quiet day until lunch, before Blaze spotted Aahna rushing towards him. She had been talking to a few first years from one of the other classes.
Blaze immediately got ready for a slew of questions while Rachel, who was sitting beside him and poking at her food, looked up at Aahna with little interest. It wasn't uncommon for the latter to be excited about something or the other.
"Big Bro! Is it true that you displayed Righteous Fury while defending a pixie? Also, did you really defeat a fourth year Houri in a one on one combat? I heard there was no handicap and that the Houri has been hospitalized," Aahna babbled excitedly, her hands in sync with her emotion.
"Mmhmm," Blaze nodded curtly. There was no point in hiding it.
"IT'S TRUE!" Aahna shouted across to the students expectantly waiting for her reply. Her answer animated the students, who went into a frenzied discussion as more of them joined the group.
"I am sorry Big Bro. I have gravely misjudged your character," Aahna suddenly apologized, but she seemed happy rather than sorry.
"What?" Blaze looked at her confused.
"I knew you were strong, but I didn't think you were the righteous type who would stand up for justice, regardless of the situation," she piped back.
"I don't know if I am all that righteous, but shouldn't all angels strive to be so?" he pondered, putting a sliced peach in his mouth. He patted on the seat beside him to make the sprightly angel stop bouncing.
Aahna pulled the chair and sat down, "True, but not many will dare to go up against a Houri of the Malakim, even if they are stronger than the Houri." She grabbed a strawberry from Blaze's fruit salad and popped it into her mouth.
"Oi, get your own" he admonished, pulling the plate away from her. He had always been a little defensive with food on his plate.
"Can you please tell me what is going on?" Rachel interjected, her interest suddenly piqued. Like Blaze, she spent a lot of her free time by herself and wasn't up to date with the latest gossip.
"Class 4A's combat teacher and a Houri were apparently mistreating a pixie. Big Bro, the caring soul that he is, stepped in to save the day. Long story short: the Houri is in the hospital, bro displayed righteous fury, and the teacher has been fired. But I'd like to hear her account," Aahna explained, pointing at Blaze. Her words were a little exaggerated and playful.