Greetings. This is my first story. After reading works here for years, the writing bug hit, something I've never tried. I've figured out a few things so far, it's hard to write a decent story and the value of an editor. Since I couldn't find one and have only self-edited and keep finding minor errors, sorry if I missed one.
I started writing it free-form a while ago with a basic idea and a few characters. The story morphed and expanded. Honestly it just did, I had no control over it. I would write a part, leave it for a few weeks, re-read it and made judgments. Some parts were pretty good and others were terrible. But I persevered to make it into something I felt comfortable to let others read and have released it to learn other's opinions.
I'm ready for comments and want to hear them honestly with the goal of getting better, but please have something to say other than "it sucked". That doesn't really give me much to go on.
I've also noticed that some readers don't want to read certain themes without being warned, at a minimum. Because of that, here are the warnings for this story.
Specifically there are two scenes, one extended, that contain violence against a female. I will make a note at the beginning of the chapter for those that want to skip that part. As they say in Hollywood, "it was needed for the story line." Maybe, maybe not, but I think it makes it a better story by giving insight on that character's life and actions. So if that bothers you, skip it.
Secondly, this story is long. It is broken into chapters for easier reading, but the story is well over 100k words, and there is already a second story with most of the same characters being written. I will publish the next chapter after this one is published as soon as I am able.
Being such a writing novice, I have learned that some authors detail out their stories, using notes or storyboards. I am much too lazy for that so I just started writing. I really thought it would be a ten or twelve thousand words. After writing most of the story I had well over 100k words and realized an ideal story length here is a tenth of that. I gave up on limiting the length and tried to develop the characters and the story line.
Anyway I am interested in comments or constructive criticism because I want to be a better writer. Please enjoy.
This work copyrighted by me. Nobody has any right to publish this in any form without express written permission from me.
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She glided flawlessly into the lobby of the expensive hotel. Immediately the three men who were standing in the lobby conversing together stopped mid-sentence and stared. It was impossible
not
to stare after she gave the three men that deep look. Her haunting beauty was more powerful than any will the men had to ignore it. In an instant, they were transfixed at the gorgeous woman walking by them.
She was truly beautiful. Classically female. Tall. Firm large breasts and slender, athletic legs that had an incredible set of ass cheeks riding over them. Her sexy cocktail dress hung on her frame like a glove, showing off her incredibly proportioned body. Her hips were curvy but not too wide, and balanced perfectly within her hourglass-shaped body. Her thick long brown hair had just enough curl in it to be authentic. The gorgeous deep blue eyes were like lasers with that infectious perfect smile. Ringlets framed her beautiful, classic-model face with high cheekbones and lips that were thicker than most but still natural.
She was a tall woman - two inches less than six feet -- lithe and trim, with shining healthy skin. She had been an athlete in high school and college and it showed. Her arms and legs were toned, yes, but it was more than that. There was an aura of confidence to how she moved, confirming she was completely in control of her body and her surroundings. Everything on her was authentic original equipment; there was no fakeness about her anywhere.
She entered the elevator and punched 32. The lighted button glared back at her as the display counted the floors upward. When she stepped out, she turned left and finding room 3245, knocked on the door. A man in his late 50's and still wearing his extravagant tailor-made suit opened the door.
"Hello Sam, god it's so good to see you again!"
Her smile was wide and inviting. Her arms reached around the back of his neck as she brought her mouth up to his, giving him a long wet kiss. With a hint of a sultry giggle she replied "Hi Roger, it's so good to see you again, too. How long has it been, three months? I hope you haven't been enjoying the company of other girls and ignoring me."
"Oh gosh no, sweetie. There is no one else but you in my life. Jessie my personal assistant is the only one who attends to my needs, like it's always been. I just had her tested along when I did with Sharon yesterday, since we were both coming to town. It keeps Sharon happy when I go to her for my testing instead of her chasing me down, you know? But Jesse is nothing more to me than a sexual safety valve. You're my girl."
She smiled. Tonight was going to be a continuation of three months ago. She remembered it like it was last night.
"You are my everything, Sam. It's been hellishly busy at work and I've been out of the country. It's because I'm no longer VP of Worldwide Sales, they promoted me to CEO a year earlier than the plan. And it's been incredibly successful. In that time, I've already added a hundred million to the company's bottom line and I get seven percent of that as a bonus. This is the first chance I've been able to return to Seattle to see you now that you don't travel like you used to. You wouldn't come to Europe to see me so I've come back to see you. Now I'm back, and I've so missed what I'm looking at right now."
He pulled her close and gave her another wicked wet kiss. She molded her body into his chest so he could feel her large breasts crushing into him while he inhaled her intoxicating perfume. "God I've missed this", he murmured. His hands tightly roamed her perfect curves as their wet mouths kissed, his hands seeking to touch every inch of her perfectly proportioned body like a jewel thief in the safe trying to gather every last bauble before he made his break.
She wasted no time and started rubbing his crotch, feeling his growing manhood. "Fuck me Roger," she groaned in his ear as he felt her warm breath against his skin. "I want you to cum in me with this magnificent cock of yours. You're girl is here baby. Fuck your girl. Fuck me now."
He had no desire for another drink; clothes fell from both of them in seconds. She dropped to her knees before him and in hardly any time his hardening cock was in her mouth. She sucked it a few times to get it wet as it grew rock hard, and then plunged it down her throat until his pubic hair was hard against her nose. She held his cock deep within her throat and time stopped for him. She rippled her tongue on his member as the deep throating continued and her nostrils flared, sucking in oxygen to stay conscious.
"OH FUCK!", Roger gasped. "Jesus Samantha, how do you do that thing with your tongue? Blow me baby, suck that hard cock!"
As she felt him getting close to coming, she let off and pushed him back to the couch in the elaborate suite. Climbing on top of him, his hard staff drove between her slender curvy legs. Her next move was to drop her body onto the hardness in one swift motion, burying his hard cock in her wet pussy. She rode him hard, passionately, like only a true girlfriend could. Leaning forward her mouth crushed his, combining their wet tongues and saliva. She rode her mount, humping him powerfully and forcefully. His hands found their way to her soft, natural, perfectly formed tits and mauled them with a frenzy. He didn't last long as Samantha slammed up and down, riding his hard shaft. As it was the first time in almost a week he had cum in a woman, his sperm blasted deep into Samantha's wet, tight hole. She let out a squeal as he gasped and grunted.
It was like their ongoing encounters of the last seven years never had a break. She got him off like no other woman in his life, ever. Even his two ex-wives. After he softened, she rolled off of him and laid her naked body next to his. Both were still panting as she fanned her long soft brunette hair onto his chest. Her scent was exhilarating to him. After what seemed like ten minutes or more, he spoke.
"Really Sam, I was serious a few months ago. Marry me. I'll make you happy and it will be worth your while. You'll be rich, and you can quit escorting forever."
She paused for what seemed like a long silence before she spoke. It was not the first time she had heard such a statement from a rich client.
"Roger, you are a fascinating man, but we've talked about this. I can't marry any man who has hired me. No matter how sincere, I'll always be a whore to you. It's just human nature. I don't want to be just arm candy for a husband, only an equal. That can't happen with us. You know I'm always here for your pleasure."
"I'd never ask you to sign a pre-nup, Sam. You'd be worth half of a three hundred and fifty million dollar estate. The corporate jet is at my disposal, you know. Of course you do because you've flown on it. It could be yours to use anytime you want. Paris for lunch with your friends. Or catch a tan on Kauai."