This is my first attempt at erotic fiction. I welcome constructive criticism.
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Jim looked at his wristwatch for probably the fifth time in the last two minutes, and for what was probably the seventh time this morning, berated himself for setting out on this morning's venture. He was a creature of habit, and this was a deviation from his Saturday morning routine that wasn't going altogether well. Normally, it was: rise late, make an excellent cappuccino with his up-market espresso machine, then have brunch out on the back porch. His routine definitely did not involve standing in a chain coffee-shop waiting for a barista to make him a sub-par cappuccino before he drove almost an hour away to an antique furniture auction. It wasn't as if the store was busy. Jim glanced around at the other patrons also waiting for their order. A couple of frat boys who were way too loud for this time of the morning, what appeared to be a uni student staring intently at her mac book, a (presumably) married couple who kept glancing nervously at their child-filled car in the car park, and a handsome woman standing slightly apart from all the other customers.
Jim tried his best not to stare, but the woman was rather striking. She wasn't overly tall...maybe a couple of inches over 5 foot? Long silken black hair, white long-sleeved blouse tucked into jeans that hugged her like a second skin, and black stiletto heels which not only made her legs exceedingly shapely, but gave the woman another three to four inches in height. As she started to look in Jim's direction, he rapidly glanced at his watch in an attempt to hide his intense examination of the only attractive thing in the entire shop.
It was at this moment that the young man behind the counter called out his name. Thankful for the subtle change in circumstances, Jim took a couple of hurried steps towards the counter to grab his coffee, only to bump into the woman he had surreptitiously been admiring less than a minute ago.
The two people uttered "um, sorry" almost simultaneously while they regained their balance. When Jim looked around to see who had bumped into him, he looked directly into a face that robbed him of any additional thoughts. Her big brown eyes looked right back at him, and he watched as her slight frown of annoyance morphed into raised eyebrows above a slightly amused little smile.
"Sorry, but that's my coffee." she said.
"Um, I think he said my name."
The woman turned her gaze upon the young man behind the counter, who instantly blushed and looked like he would much rather be anywhere else right now. Preferably a distance that was measured in miles. He definitely did not want to be the center of everyone's attention, nor did he want this attractive woman starting at him and silently waiting for confirmation.
"Did you say "Kim"?" she asked.
"Or did you say "Jim"?" Jim chimed in.
The young man's voice cracked as he said "Cappuccino for Jim". Jim tried to keep his amusement at the young barista's obvious discomfort hidden, but he was only partially successful. In an attempt to recover his composure, he tried to smile as a means of reassuring the fellow behind the counter. "Thanks", Jim said.
Turning back towards the handsome woman still standing beside him, Jim said "It's an easy enough mistake to make. Kim....Jim..." He shrugged slightly. "My mistake" said Kim. "Sorry".
"Please. Don't. The pleasure was all mine." said Jim with a grin, only to realize a split-second later that his comment could be taken as either an attempt at humor, or as a sarcastic commentary about the woman's error. Looking at her pretty oval face, Jim saw one eyebrow arch slightly and the smile faded ever so slightly.
Jim, you idiot, fix this. Think quick!
he thought.
"Err... I mean, without that understandable mistake, I'd never have bumped into you. I mean, met you! Um.."
Jim
, he thought,
you're a 55 year old man. You are not a thoughtless teenager. This woman is much younger than you. Stop stumbling over your words like a complete jackass!
Kim's expression changed back to one of amusement at the older man's obvious discomfort. Once again, the young barista came to Jim's rescue: "Excuse me, miss? Your cappuccino?", he said as he held out a cardboard cup. Kim retrieved her coffee from the youth behind the counter and then turned to face Jim again. Maintaining eye contact, the younger woman said "Let's try this again, shall we?" She extended her hand, saying "Hi. My name is Kim. Pleased to meet you."
Jim looked down at the woman's proffered hand, noticing her long well-manicured nails painted in the same shade of red as her lipstick. He stared for only a moment before recovering his composure somewhat.
"Hello Kim. I'm Jim. Jim Peterson." he said as took her hand and shook it. Jim was a little surprised when Kim's handshake was firm yet brief. She leaned slightly forward as if to sip her coffee, reconsidered at the last moment, and gently blew on the surface of the coffee instead. Raising her eyes to peep over the brim of the coffee cup, she noticed Jim's intense stare. She silently laughed to herself. She wasn't unused to men looking at her. Without a shred of vanity, she knew that she was reasonably attractive. But this man wasn't staring lewdly. He looked a little like a deer staring at the headlights of an oncoming vehicle. Innocent, yet somehow mesmerized.
"So, Jim, cappuccino is your preferred style of coffee?" said Kim.
Jim shook his head briefly, as if to try and wake up. He grimaced slightly. "Yes, however, this..." and he lifted his cup a little ".. barely qualifies as a cappuccino. I much prefer making it myself, but I didn't have time this morning."
"Do you live locally, Jim, or are you just passing through?" Kim said.
"A little of both. I live closer to the city."
"If you like good coffee but don't want to make it yourself, you should try Tazzina di Caffรจ on 4
th
Avenue. They make really good coffee there. And pastries." Kim lifted her hand to her mouth with her finger tips close together, and blew a 'Chef's kiss'. "Belissimo!". She grinned up at Jim, and he smiled back.
"I'll have to try that some other weekend, but not today...I'm on my way to a furniture auction..." Jim suddenly glanced at his wristwatch. "Oh damn! I'm going to be late if I don't hustle! Kim, it has genuinely been nice to meet you, but I'm afraid I have to go." Jim took a quick step backwards and then hesitated. He turned again to face Kim, who was watching Jim's flustered actions with laughter in her eyes.
"It really was a pleasure to meet you, Kim." he said.
"Perhaps we'll bump into each other again some day?" Kim replied.