Prince Mordecai: okay, so Chapter 3 needed a few more rewrites. I think youāre making too big a deal about it. I was under the influence of ⦠at the time, which is probably the only reason i sent it in as-is. I wonder if Literotica would let me recall it. Ah well, too late anyway. Chapter 3 served to introduce who will eventually become the main character and to update you on the political situation of this ānot-too-distant futureā earth that i am portraying. Perhaps i should have left the sex scenes out of that one altogether, but itās too late for that now.
Also, I think now I will take the opportunity to answer a few of the accusations put to me by your reader feedback.
Item 1: "I donāt get the āFinal Fantasyā title! I donāt see a connection!" Reply:You will. Just be patient.
Item 2: "Make the sex scenes longer and more descriptive." Reply:I suppose you think it's easy. Okay, show me something youāve written, then you can complain about my problems. Besides, some chapters are bound to be worse than others. If you're having problems, just hang in there 'till chapter 5. A real treat, I promise.
Item 3: "Where will you be posting the chapters that you won't be posting here because of that sissy no-underage-stories rule?" Reply:I don't know yet. Rest assured, I will tell you as soon as I know myself.
Item 4: "I think youāre a terrific writer. Your stories are the best ones on the site." Reply:You see, Eriza? Other people think so, too.
Incidentally, as of today, i will no longer be reading āreader feedback.ā if you have something to say to me, e-mail me directly. ( amateria@otakumail.com ) if you're not willing to let me write back, your opinions can't be worth listening to.
āPrince Mordecai
Chapter 4 of 106: Back at school
Our parents had been back for a week now. I had learned many things I did not know.
As I lay in bed half-asleep one fine morning, I thought about my agenda for the day. I was to accompany Naddie to school to meet her friends at 8, and I was to be at the mansion of Jin-ka for lunch at noon. As I lay in bed, eyes closed, still too close to asleep to think coherently, I noticed a peculiar sensation in my lower areas. I was a little too groggy to think about it much, except that it felt nice. It was kind of like⦠there are no similes for it. The good feeling was building, though, I could feel some kind of pressure building. And suddenly I sat up just as I came powerfully. As the jets subsided, I sighed (now THAT'S the way to wake up!), but then some kind of 'wait a minute⦠what the�' feeling hit, and my eyes snapped open. There was a lump on top of me under the covers, preventing me from moving.
I threw the covers aside to reveal my little sister Natalie (Naddie for short) kneeling on my bare legs, my pajama bottoms 'round my ankles.
"Naddie!"
She looked up at me, a cute blush on an innocent face, and a thin strand of white goo connecting her mouth to my still-upright cock. After the shock wore off, she swallowed, smiled, and giggled. She then lunged forward, threw her arms about me happily, and squealed, "Rise and shine!"
"Sh!" I quieted her. If our parents heard herā¦
She didn't seem to get the⦠awkwardness⦠of the situation, but she did quiet down. "What's wrong, didn't it feel good?"
"Of course it did⦠but Naddie, you're my sister, so you really should stop doing that!"
Naddie gave a bewildered grin. "But you're the one who started it, fucking me right after you moved in!"
"Uh⦠yeah, Naddie⦠but I was wrong⦠it was just⦠it's not rightā¦"
"Not right? But Morty⦠we love each other, right?"
"Well⦠yeah, Naddie, of course we do, butā¦"
"So what's wrong?" before I could answer, she reached forward and kissed me on the mouth.
I know what you must be thinking from this dialogue, and you're going to have to know sometime, so I guess I should tell you now. My own dirty little secret:
If Naddie sounds retarded to you, you're right.
When my parents had come back after the weekend, after the traditional tearful hellos, they said that I was probably wondering why she was acting so strangely. When I gave an embarrassed nod, they spilled the beans:
Shortly after I left, Naddie had been diagnosed with some fourteen-letter brain disease that leaves her with the emotional maturity of a 5 or 6 year-old child.
They hadn't told me about it in their letters or over the phone because they didn't want me to worry (should give you a clue as to how bright THEY are). But everyone in town and at school knew (including the famous 'Brian' who had convinced her to dress up like she did that first night), and was very understanding, so she had had no trouble making friends.
But because I hadn't known it when I first came back, I was now trapped in an incestuous relationship with my little sister.
And it was too late to do anything about it. If it came out now, not only would I be ostracized for incest, but also, in a way, for something akin to child molestation.
You see, Naddie is of-age, (albeit just barely) but whatever this brain disorder is that she has makes her act about ten years younger. She thinks she's an innocent little kid. This Brian character had no doubt taken advantage of her insatiable innocence to trick her into agreeing to do it with him that night. And when I had screwed her instead, I had thrown a switch in that damaged little mind that turned me into her boyfriend in her eyes.