Thank you for the comments on my story, both on website and e-mailed to me directly.
I responded in the comment section to a couple complaints, but to repeat here, I'm doing a remake of Party of 5. I saw no reason to change the names or to reinvent the wheel, especially in Chapter 1. My goal is to end up pretty close to where the original Party of 5 was around Chapter 20 with a few differences. Still, half the fun is in the getting there, right? After that it's all virgin territory like Josh himself!
If it was too short it is because I have a LOT more to go. Also, I thought 10 pages of typing meant a lot of pages on Literotica. Nope! First time writer here. This page is 16 pages, so at least a bit longer.
Perhaps those that are impatient for the "good stuff" should either wait for a while before reading until I've built up several chapters, or find a story with a more instant reward. Come back in a month ο
I have no idea how many people are like me, but I find little enjoyment in immediate sex/gang bang sex stories. I need to be invested in characters to enjoy it fully. Not a criticism to anyone else's stuff or tastes, I just write what I myself would like to read.
Special thanks to my editor for helping out. I forgot if he wanted me to list him here, so I won't mention him by name this time. I'll ask him for next chapter if he wants me to name him.
"WHAT THE FUCK?" Josh screamed as he was awoken from a particularly graphic dream, got hopelessly tangled in his covers, and found himself in a wet heap on the floor.
"I warned you to get up," Jacquie managed to get out between breath-stealing laughter. Her normally angelic voice suddenly sounding more like nails on a chalkboard to Josh.
"Yesterday!"
"And today. 5 times."
"So you tried to drown me?" Josh sputtered.
"Are you awake?"
"Yes!"
"Then it was a risk worth taking. Now get ready. You need to load the car with all our supplies. Here, I made your checklist. We still have go to the store for a few things. If your sister takes forever to get ready, I might send you there before we all leave together. We can swing by and pick up Valerie and be at the cabin by 1."
"Okay, okay. Give me 10 minutes and I'll be down. Is that fast enough for you, fire marshal?"
Jacquie just giggled and moved to leave.
"Where are you going now?"
"To get some more ice water. Dawn is even harder to wake up than you!"
The idea that Dawn was about to get doused was enough to brighten Josh's morning mood. That and his morning erection had seemingly escaped Jacquie's attention this time. He made a point to delay his shower long enough to hear the fireworks next door.
Josh checked out Jacquie's list. The usual collection of food, drinks, cooler and other camping supplies that Jacquie had him gather every time they headed north-east to the family cabin at Big Bear Lake. She also included a starred reminder to grab all of the luggage from each room, because God forbid a girl in this house carry a bag 20 feet. The drive was only a little over 2 hours if anyone but Dawn was behind the wheel. She'd get them there a lot quicker if you didn't mind feeling like you were on a particularly unsafe rollercoaster.
Josh fired off a quick text to Valerie to make sure she was up. No one took as excruciatingly long to get ready as Dawn, but Valerie was a close second. Where Dawn was the queen of hot & slutty, Valerie could have been the cover model for Young Christian Monthly. With her blue eyes, blond hair, hour glass figure and a classically beautiful face, Josh was the envy of all of his friends. Of course, their admittedly less attractive girlfriends were probably willing to have sex with them.
Josh spent the rest of the morning planning his seduction of the beauty. Alice had sold the family cabin that his Mother had owned since before he was born years ago. He had only vague memories of going there when he was little.
Since they had purchased the 3 bedroom Big Bear cabin, Josh had always gotten a room for himself being the only male of the group. He had never appreciated the extra privacy more than now. In the almost two years they had dated, Valerie and Josh had never slept in the same bed together, let alone overnight for an entire weekend. Even with her graduating soon, he couldn't believe Mr. and Mrs. Lipton had approved this weekend trip.
Thoughts of Valerie naked, moaning and in various sexual positions occupied Josh's mind until a straight out of a horror movie scream came through his wall.
"Motherfucker, I'll fucking kill you!"
Oh yes, it was going to be a good weekend.
*****
Josh finished loading up the jeep right as his sisters emerged from the house. The 5-seater vehicle was tight when it was just the 4 of them heading to the cabin, but add in Valerie in a second and it was basically a MENSA test to make it all work.
Luckily for Josh he had two things going for him. First, what Alice was to math, and physics, and chemistry, and history... you get the idea... Josh was to packing a vehicle. He was the Einstein of his generation in loading cargo. A necessity when living with three chicks and being the go-to individual for lifting heavy objects.
His second advantage was Dawn's skanky attire. She could fit a week's worth of outfits into a medium sized purse. Guess there were some advantages to being a functioning nymphomaniac.
Unfortunately, any space Dawn saved the family was more than filled by his other two sisters' need to pack up their entire fucking bedrooms to go away for 3 days.
Jacquie was such a home body that whenever she left the home she felt the need to go overboard with accessorizing and outfit changes. Josh had tried to explain she basically needed shorts, a bathing suit and some t-shirts, but his arguments had fallen on deaf ears. If Brad Pitt showed up and invited Jacquie to join him on the red carpet for his latest movie premiere, Josh was pretty sure Jacquie was prepared.
And while Alice may have fallen somewhere in between her sisters in terms of clothes, she was perhaps even worse because 3 days of vacation had to include a collection of books that would take Josh a year get through. He had bought her a Kindle for Christmas a few years earlier which she had assured him was the 'perfect' gift. Never mind he'd seen her use it a few times for maybe a week and then gone back to the ones she could hold in her hand. She liked how they smelled or something.
Speaking of Dawn's attire, holy shit. Josh couldn't help but check out Dawn as she led her sisters out of the house towards the car. Somewhere in the back of Josh's mind he noted Alice jumping into the front passenger seat as Jacquie went about her inspection making sure everything was there
Dawn took out a hand mirror from her purse to check herself out near the front of the jeep. If she was wearing any less she'd literally be naked. He was going to grab his dental floss to offer her something more substantial to put on. Her outfit reminded him of those models that posed naked for Sports Illustrated, but had outfits painted on them. You still knew they were naked though because you could see nipples. Josh could see nipples. If her mid drift exposing tank top wasn't sexy enough, she'd obviously used a pair of scissors to cut it up in (almost) the best places.
"Put your tongue back in your mouth, pervert. I know this is the most skin you've ever seen in your pathetic life, but maybe save the lust for someone it isn't illegal to fuck?"
