Hello! First of all, want to say thank you so much, for the warm reception the first chapter received. As mentioned it's really the first piece of creative writing I've ever done, and it was slightly rushed.
So with the positivity from the first chapter, I've been pretty motivated about the second chapter. I really sunk into it, and it somehow ended up at over 10k words.
I'll warn you up front, there's a lot of exposition and world-building going on in this chapter to set things up. I'll also warn you, that I'm a bit unsure about my ability to write dialogue well (Any pointers would be greatly appreciated). Also, chose to stick with the categorisation more due to future plans, though there is a bit more involvement of that sort in this chapter.
I've started on the third chapter, and hope that I can get it finished in around a week, but that's somewhat dependent on how busy work gets, and whether I get enticed to enjoy the sun with a few pints in a beer garden this weekend.
As before I'd love to hear what everyone thinks of this chapter, and the story so far. If you're enjoying it let me know. If you have any criticisms also let me know, I'd like to know my weaknesses so I can work on them.
Anyway, I hope you enjoy this, I had a fun time writing it.
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My Mission from Mia
Chapter 2
Powerful emotions hit the four of us as what Mia had said sunk in. I heard loud gasps come from the sisters on my right and sobs come from my own sister to my left. I didn't know how to react, torn between disbelief, anger and sadness. None of us could even form words, just trying to process what was happening. I had a thought that Mia was lying to us, but the certainty and remorse in her voice as she told us we were seconds away from dying disavowed me of that notion. I looked up at the goddess and she looked down at us with a sad smile and a slight nod, answering my unspoken request for confirmation.
I felt my eyes start to water as a tear threatened to burst forth. I blinked away the tear, took a deep breath and set a hand out to either side to provide what little comfort I could to Sarah, Harriet and Charlotte. Sarah immediately took my left hand, and I felt her body shaking slightly due to the sobs. Charlotte took my right as Harriet placed her hand on top. I squeezed both hands before turning my gaze back to Mia. Swallowing a lump in my throat I said to her "Okay, so you saved us from death, uh... thanks for that I guess."
Mia let out a little chuckle at the awkward gratitude, but let me continue. "I guess the big question is what being your champions entails. Though you are right about having us at a disadvantage, I don't think any of us are ready to die just yet?" The second part coming out as a question to the girls who shook their head to confirm my suspicions as I looked at them.
My eyes lingered on Sarah's nude form a second longer than I was comfortable with, just long enough to realise how incredible she looked even covering herself to try to preserve her modesty. She was tall at 5 foot 10, she'd recently taken to dying her hair bubblegum pink which was currently up in a long ponytail, though slightly dishevelled from what she had been doing only minutes prior. Her body was slim, though her breasts, at a guess around a C cup, looked all the bigger on her thin frame. Her long smooth legs seemed to stretch on forever, and I was forced to pull my eyes away as a wave of shame hit me with the thoughts running through my head in that moment. 'We need to have a talk about what exactly Sarah was doing, but that needs to wait for later' I thought to myself.
"I'm sure there are things to discuss, b-but could we get some clothes before we have that discussion" Harriet said suddenly from my right. Her voice had a bit of a waver to it betraying her nervousness.
"Oh of course" Mia said waving her hands as some white robes magically in front of us "These should suffice for now, once you have made a decision I can give you something more suitable." We quickly put on the form fitting robes that left less to the imagination than I would have liked and stood in front of the goddess waiting for her to continue. Once she was satisfied we were a bit more comfortable she carried on "I don't have as much time as I would like to explain things to you, so I will have to give you a brief overview for now." "I preside over the world of Xethrel alongside a number of other gods and goddesses. As mentioned I am a goddess of lust and passion, however I also take shared responsibility over my elven kin."
The pointed ears made a lot more sense after that last statement. I tried to play it calm on the surface, but my inner nerd was freaking out a bit. A lifetime of reading fantasy books, watching fantasy films and series and playing RPGs, and here in front of me stood an actual, real life elf, so fucking cool, although not quite as cool as if I didn't have the feeling I was about to be pulled into something crazy and dangerous.
"Recently the elves of Salonia, one of the countries on Xethrel, have embraced elven supremacy" Mia continued with an expression of disgust crossing her face "This started after the former king died a year ago and was replaced by his son Rhys." I looked over at my girls and their expressions were as grim as I felt mine must have been. "I believe that he is acting on behalf of a patron -- Fayeth, an elven goddess of battle -- she has long held beliefs that elves were a superior race to others on Xethrel" The goddess curled a lip as she said the other goddesses name as if there were a bad smell hanging around "It is my belief that she is backing Rhys to push this agenda of hers further." I nodded in understanding as I processed her words -- so elf Nazis were acting on behalf of a crazy war goddess.
"I'm guessing that you want us to act as your champions to stop the elf supremacists?" Harriet asked from my right. It was what I would have guessed based on what had been said so far and was confirmed with a nod from Mia.
"That is essentially correct, though I don't intend to throw you into the middle of the capital to storm the castle just yet" the pretty elf said "First I would like you to help some of the other races in Salonia to escape the country before building up a rebellion. This will not only help a lot of people in increasing danger, but will give you the time to grow stronger and acclimate to the powers I will bestow upon you."
We all perked up at that, powers that she would bestow on us sounded fucking awesome, and it was Charlotte that asked the question we were all thinking "What powers?"
Mia laughed at the question "Thought that might grab your attention, I will once again have to be brief in my answer as our time together is growing short. To Tony I will grant powers that allow him to manipulate biology, to Sarah I will grant powers over the mind, to Charlotte I bestow powers of crafting and to Harriet I grant powers of the voice. These powers will work within your understanding of the topic."
Holy shit, those sounded overpowered as fuck, and Sarah recognised that too as she asked "If the powers are as all-encompassing as they seem to be, why can't we just walk into this King Rhys' castle and demolish him straight away" I nodded along with her question.
"While they may be powerful, they will take some time to get used to, and it will take practice to unlock their full potential" Mia replied "Now I must ask you if you are willing to become my champions, unfortunately I will have to ask you to decide quickly, just know that I cannot send you back to your world without you dying nearly immediately, but that you will also face dangers should you choose to accept."
Warning received the four of us huddled together, Sarah was the first to speak "So we're definitely going to accept right?" I nodded as did Charlotte, but I noticed a touch of hesitation from Harriet and quirked my eyebrow her way.
"I-I'm scared Tony" the elder ginger sister said in response to the unspoken question "It's not that I don't want to help people, but I've never even been in a fight and now we're gonna go and fight an army?" Harriet's question sobered me a little, and I could see the logic behind her words and understand her concerns.
"I get it Harri, but the way I see it, either we go back home and die immediately, or we go to Xethrel and at least have a chance of surviving, plus we get some pretty awesome powers from the sounds of it" I said "Look, Harri, I'll look after you, I promise" I followed up placing my hand on her shoulder and looking into her eyes as she gave a small nod.