"Well, I suppose that wasn't too bad for a first attempt." I thought as I read the comments from my first story.
It was hard to disagree with them, especially the comments about how the buildup was the best part. That had been the easiest part of the story to write, it wasn't surprising that it was also the easiest part to read. The words had just flown straight to the page, I wasn't even sure I had needed to do any actual editing there beyond the occasional misspelled or double typed word.
The advice I had read, "Write what you know", had worked even better than the author had said it would. I had been trying for years to write a creditable story, but they all seemed to dissolve once I got started. The trouble would come after I introduced the characters and they began to interact. I was never able to really imagine them fully, didn't really know them. It still amazed me that other authors were able to create entire worlds, populate them with fully realized people, and not lose track of who knew who, wanted what, or why.
So I took a shortcut. Decided to literally write what I knew. And if there was one thing I knew, it was that I am in love with my wife's sister, Kelly.
So when I wrote, I told the readers all about how I came to be where I was. How I met my wife, and then her sister, and the decades of longing I have felt. It went well, and easily, right up until it came time for the action, the payoff, the moment the readers had been waiting for. When "the guy finally got the girl." That part stuttered, it was difficult to write. It was strange that this would be such a challenge, considering the many hundreds of nights I have fallen asleep with visions of exactly that.
The problem is that it isn't real, as much as I wish it were, and I haven't yet learned the art of creation. Description maybe, grammar and pacing maybe, but creation? Definitely not. The details fled when the time came for my protagonist, me, to finally win my heart's desire. Like the characters of my other stories, I didn't really know what that would look like. Ah well, at least I had a story to start with and feedback not only from readers but from my girlfriends and my wife who knew me.
My wife of course is quite concerned about the small changes I have worked in to the story of our life together, feeling that I have given over two decades of happy marriage insufficient time. True, I couldn't imagine life without Nicole. The strength of our admittedly unorthodox marriage is the only reason I can even admit my feelings to myself, much less put them on display for others to see. She is the one who has earned my trust so fully that I can admit to her my illicit desire for Kelly. She was the one who could master her own doubts and insecurities so fully that she could hope for me to find happiness with her own sister. She is the one who makes my impossible hope real.
My girlfriend Jessica, the one who lives a thousand miles away, read the story and enjoyed it. Her feedback however mirrored many of the other readers. She wanted more, felt the erotic scene at the end was too small. She told me she had hoped the two sisters would both be involved in the final scene, siblings and husband making love with one another. I couldn't find the words to explain that it wasn't there because this was my true story, my real love, my real hopes. That to put two of my greatest loves together like that, force them to change the nature of their relationship to one another in order to serve me, would be to betray them both. Certainly it would be wonderful if romance developed between the two of them so we could find ourselves together in that way. I would give anything if could be so completely unconcerned with convention and judgement that we freely loved another in every way. But the relationship between them must develop between them, not subservient to me or my relationships with them. Otherwise it would always be poisoned by obligation.
On the other hand, my girlfriend Chris, who lives only a few minutes from my house, read the story on a night I stayed with her. Her feedback was less verbal, far more physical, and would have made an excellent real-life example of the type of sex the readers were looking for. Maybe I should write that scene into the next chapter somehow, change the participants a bit so it isn't blatantly obvious this is a true story. It was certainly amazing enough in reality to warrant the effort, and without a doubt I will spend many evenings imagining Kelly and I together that way.
In the meanwhile, life goes on. I had an interview last week for an executive position at the same company Kelly works for. She told me about the opening, it was not one that would be advertised, and the money is outstanding. Kelly is also an executive there, but in a different division. She met me for coffee, our shared addiction, the day before, so she could give me some advice on what to expect. As helpful as it was, and as much as I want the job, the real reason I wanted to meet was because it gave me an excuse to spend time alone with Kelly.
Last week went by fast, as often happens. The store, kids, taking the brand-new car to the shop for the fifth time in the six months we have owned it, it was busy enough to keep my mind almost completely off my upcoming lunch date.
Almost.
I remember standing in line at the grocery store one afternoon when the impossibly young cashier said something about her own coffee addiction. I immediately thought of Kelly and our love of coffee. I felt an unexpected pang of longing that nearly took my breath away and lingered with me for the rest of the day. Little things reminded me of her, seeing the same model of car she drove on the road, drinking a glass of wine, enough to keep her lightly on my mind as she had been for all of these years.
Coffee went wonderfully.
I walked in the door and she turned towards me, flashing a smile. Kelly's face and the tone of her voice was teasing, her body language relaxed. "Nice of you to finally show up.", she teased.
I had spotted her before I even parked the car. 5'6", dark glossy hair, the amazing body of an old style pin up girl, and a presence that drew the room to her. How could I not have noticed? I was certain that anyone who happened to glance through the windows would have noticed her instantly as well. Or maybe it was just me.
"Well, I wouldn't want to have you question my intentions."
Kelly laughed. Ten seconds in and already the trip was already worthwhile.
I walked up beside her, and the two of us headed for the counter. We stood close, our shoulders touching as we ordered. Her, a vanilla latte with the cinnamon sprinkled on top like I once suggested to her years ago. Me, black coffee as large and caffeinated as I could get. I offered to bring the drinks when they were done, and Kelly went to go find us a seat.
The barista, an attractive woman only a few years younger than me, was very good at what she did. Just a few moments later I had our drinks in hand, and went to look for Kelly. The place wasn't quite crowded, but all the booths and couches were full. I found her sitting at the little coffee bar looking out the windows.
I sat beside her. The chairs were all askew from earlier patrons, and mine was a little too close to hers. Perfect. Our legs pressed up against one another as I sat, but she did not pull away. She turned to me as I handed her the latte, and put her other hand on my shoulder as she said thank you.
We made small talk for a few minutes, during which I must have heard her laugh a dozen times. I think that's the thing really, that makes her so precious to me. Not so much the desire to please, but to be pleased. She takes joy in so many things that you feel uplifted when you are around her. Eventually our conversation turned to work, my upcoming interview.
We spent a good half hour talking about that interview, mostly because we couldn't stay on topic. Notes about questions or job requirements quickly led into funny stories about her coworkers. If we talked about the drive, she would share something about her scary commute that morning. Every subject no matter how banal was fodder for conversation for us. We could have talked for hours, but she had to go back to work.
I could have been happy as it was, but something happened as we got ready to leave. We both needed to use the restroom; we had just had coffee and sat for an hour after all, and we headed there at the same time. Both rooms were off the same small hallway, with an entrance in the middle and the two restrooms on opposite sides. We chatted as we went in, but as we stepped into the adjoining hallway where we were invisible to the other customers; she turned and gave me a hug.
I know, it was just a hug. But it wasn't just a hug, if you know what I mean. There are hugs you give buddies when you haven't seen them in a while, hugs you give your family. All of those usually involve stopping a little distance away with our feet and leaning forward. This was not one of those. She stepped all the way in to me, her feet between mine. She put her arms around me, and pulled herself close, pressing her entire body flat against me. I could feel every inch of her from the cheek she laid on my chest, to her breasts, stomach, and her legs. She held me just a big longer than was quite comfortable, then leaned back with our bodies still touching and her arms still around me,and thanked me for the diversion from work.
Then she was off, and so was I, wondering if what if anything had just happened.
So yeah, I've been thinking about that hug every day since. I don't want to seem like one of those obsessed sort of guys, but let's face it when the woman you have loved from a distance for 20 years gives you a hug like that it makes an impression.