I published this story on 2/7/22. My original plan for the story was for it to be about fifty percent bigger than what I published. However, the final sex scene wasn't working, I knew I needed to rewrite it, but I wanted to be finished with the story and was out of ideas. So, I decided to end the story the first place I could and cut everything beyond that. I got a lot of negative comments on the ending of the story. I took this and all my other stories down in January 2023.
As I was preparing this story for republishing, I thought about changing the minor character Dmitri's home country from Ukraine to Belarus. Sadly, my lines "Things are very unstable in Ukraine. No one feels safe. Much better to take what money you can and move to America" were very prophetic. In the end, I decided to not make the change.
For republishing this story, I've decided to restore what I had cut out before. Since I originally published it, I've come up with ideas for the final sex scene that I like better than what I had. The original version was like most of my stories in that it ended right after the brother and sister had sex for the first time. This version will be unique for me in that it explores how Eli and Z handle being a couple. This version will be one of my longest stories.
We were interrupted by a knock at my dorm room door. "Come in!" I yelled. I hoped it wasn't who I thought it was.
"Hi, Eli!" said my freshman sister Z in a slightly higher-than-normal tone. I rolled my eyes and groaned inwardly before turning in my chair.
"Hi, Z," I said with my voice full of annoyance. "What are you doing here?"
Z ignored my reaction, instead offering her hand to Landon, the friend I was studying with. "I'm Z," she said with friendliness turned up to ten. "Eli's little sister." Landon stood up from my bed and shook her hand. Landon and I were both sophomores. Z leaned forward to Landon and said conspiratorially, "Mom has me check in with Eli regularly so he can keep an eye on me."
"Hi! I'm...um...Landon. Landon Chu." Landon was acting like a pretty girl had never introduced herself to him before. This was going to be bad.
Z looked at the book Landon had set on the bed. "Are you studying Organic Chemistry?" My sister chewed her gum as she waited for Landon's answer.
"Yes."
Z tilted her head slightly as she looked at Landon. I knew exactly what she was going to say. "Is that the chemistry between males and females?" She had used that line before on my friends.
"Well, um, it...it could be." Landon was totally flustered. I had warned Landon that my sister might drop by, and, if she did, she would flirt with him even though she had no interest in him. My warning him obviously did no good. "I mean I guess it could be, but that's not what we're studying now."
I said with a little heat. "We're studying. I have a lot of studying to do. What do you want?"
Z pretended not to hear me. She asked Landon, "Are you a pre-med major too?" She looked at him adoringly with her blue eyes wide as she chewed her gum and twirled some of her shoulder-length blond hair around her right index finger.
"Yes. Yes, I am." Landon was probably the smartest guy I knew, and he sounded like his brain was mush under her spell.
"I could never be a pre-med major," Z said as she twisted her body slightly back and forth. "I could never learn all the stuff you have to learn." Z's movement drew Landon's attention to the silly mathematical formula on her T-shirt. The formula was
Distance Raptor
divided by
Time Raptor
equals
Veloci Raptor
. The last two words were printed over a black velociraptor that covered most of Z's left breast. Landon was quiet for a moment as he read the shirt.
Z said, "They're 34 C's."
Landon said in a surprised tone, "What?"
"They're 34 C's. You were staring at my chest, so I thought you were trying to guess my bra size."
Landon had a horrified look on his face. "No," he said as he shook his head back and forth quickly. "No. I wasn't--"
"You thought they're a different size?"
Landon was on the verge of panic. He almost shouted, "I was just reading your shirt!"
"Oh, okay." Z went back to chewing her gum, twirling her hair, and twisting gently back and forth. She was wearing a short, white cotton skirt. No one wore a short skirt in the dorm except Z, and I think she only wore them when she came to visit me. The skirt swished back and forth, drawing my and Landon's eyes to Z's legs. She had great legs, still well-tanned after spending a lot of this summer sunning.
I said loudly, "WHAT DO YOU WANT, Z?"
"I thought I'd drop by and say hi." Z turned back to Landon. "You must be awfully smart." She said that with awe in her voice. She was very smart herself, with an SAT better than mine. "Eli is super smart, and he's asking you for help with homework."
Landon turned three shades of red. "Well, I, um...well, I am..."
"You said hi, so you can leave now," I said loudly. I was tempted to call my sister by her first name, which she hated. "Z" came from our last name, Zajaczkowski. I took a moment to collect myself. I said firmly, "I have a lot of studying to do."
Z gave me a cute, exaggerated frown. It was so funny looking that I felt my anger leave me. "I was enjoying talking with Landon." She turned to him and stuck out her hand. "It was nice meeting you, Landon."
Landon pumped her hand enthusiastically. "It was nice meeting you."
Z turned and headed toward the door, swaying her hips a little more than normal as she walked. She opened the door, turned, waved goodbye to Landon with just her fingers, and then closed the door.
Landon turned to me. "WOW! Your sister is amazing."
"She's annoying as hell. She pulls this shit all the time."
"Do you think...she'd go out with me if I asked her?"
"No. If you talked to her again without me around, she'd be friendly but would cut the conversation short. 'Hi, Landon. Nice to see ya. How is Organic going? Gotta go!'"
Landon was disappointed by this but then seemed to brush it aside. "She seemed to really like me."
I was getting frustrated. "This is why her visits drive me nuts. She drops by, flirts for a little while, and then leaves me to give the guy the bad news. She likes you as an acquaintance. The way she acted just now is how she acts around all my friends. When Dimitri is here when she drops by, I need to wipe down all the furniture because of his drooling. He's asked her out several times. She doesn't ever say no, but she never says yes."
"Can you tell me her room number? I'd like to talk to her."
Landon was not getting it. My sister was only interested in flirting with him. As much as my sister pissed me off, I was protective of her. I didn't want my friends showing up at her dorm room to pursue a relationship I knew she wasn't interested in. "I'm not going to tell you. We need to study Organic, remember? These last few problems are butt kickers."