Despite the fact that I mostly try to use Sumerian naming, I found that certain Babylonian or Akkadian equivalents were more evocative than the Sumerian versions. So, any such inconsistencies in my story are intentional.
The repetition seems to be a feature of the Sumerian texts in the original language - possibly the words were lyrics that were meant to be sung, accompanied by music.
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"From the great heaven, my mistress set her mind on the world below.
From the great heaven, mighty Inanna set her mind on the world below.
My mistress abandoned the heaven, abandoned the earth, and descended to the underworld."
~ Cuneiform on clay tablets, attributed as the words of Ninshubur, "her minister who speaks fair words, her escort who speaks trustworthy words"
Neti the gatekeeper and the Judges had returned to their domain, with Pazuzu's departure. They were greatly displeased, and spoke with great anger, even as Inanna stood at the gates and demanded egress.
"Who has ever ascended from the underworld? Who has ever risen unscathed from the underworld? Who has ever escaped with life and body from the underworld? Only appointed messengers may pass freely, as Ninshubur may. But if Inanna is to ascend from the underworld, let her provide a substitute!"
For a moment Ninshubur was afraid, but Inanna had placed a calming hand on the small of her back and addressed Neti, saying, "Your mistress has left her throne, which now sits empty. Your dark mistress has abandoned her throne, which now sits empty. Your mistress has broken the laws of the underworld, which you call perfect - for she has departed from her throne, which now sits empty. How shall you judges enforce these laws upon me, a visitor and guest to this place?"
"Visitor and guest? Say rather intruder and quarrel-maker," came the cold reply. "Ereshkigal, praised be her royal name, placed you atop that hook, as her rightful prize of war. If you are to come off that hook and leave this place, if you are to pass through this gate and leave this place, if you are to turn your back and leave this place, then offer a substitute!"
Inanna stood for some moments with head bowed. She was the Strong Mother - it was not what she wanted, to have anyone suffer in her stead.
Around the pair gathered the gallu: the demons, the chittering netherlings, the loathsome denizens of this place who were not the souls of the dead. Ninshubur grimaced.
They were the ones who knew no food, knew no drink, ate no flour offering and drank no libation. They were the ones who accepted no pleasant gifts. They never enjoyed the pleasures of the marital embrace, and never had any sweet children to kiss. They tore away a woman from her lover's embrace. They took away the child hanging from a wet-nurse's breasts. They snatched the son from a man's knee. They made the bride leave the house of the father-in-law. They crushed no bitter garlic, ate no fish or leeks.
They were the antithesis of life itself - for when the gods had created Life, in that same moment they also had to create un-Life, which the gallu embodied.
To deal with them was no humiliation, for these were part of the universal law. Inanna raised her head. Her need for haste was great - a sacrifice would have to be offered in her stead.
"Who will you accept?"
The gallu pointed as one at Ninshubur. "Inanna, proceed to the sunlit realm, for we will take this one," they intoned.
"No!" Inanna's voice rang out sharply, and she curled a protective arm around her handmaiden. "This is my beloved sukkal, my minister of fair words, my escort of trustworthy words. She bore my appeal to the gods - she did not neglect me, she did not abandon me, she did not betray me. She brought me back to life - how could I turn her over to you? Choose another."
Ninshubur turned and clasped her arms around Inanna's waist tightly. "Mistress, if there is no other choice, let me suffer in your place so that you may go," she wept.
"Never, my beloved handmaiden," Inanna told her tenderly. "Do not be worried. They will find another."
And they did. Puabana's naked form suddenly appeared before them, and fell onto her knees. The gallu pointed as one at the defeated warrior woman, whose spirit still glowed brightly with strength, and sang, "Inanna, proceed to the sunlit realm, for we will take this one."
Even as Inanna's eyes widened in shock and she opened her mouth to give a sharp refusal, Puabana raised her head. There was anguish in her eyes, but the love and courage were undimmed. The brave, loyal woman said, "Divine Mistress, my blood empowered your foe against you; my life force strengthened your foe against you; my energy aided your fie against you. Allow me to expiate my shame - let me suffer in your place so that you may go."
"Never!" Inanna cried, distressed. "No shame accrues to you, my brave priestess warrior! You who fought with all your heart and will and might, you who followed my dictates unwavering and unswerving, you who stood steadfast into death and beyond - how could I turn you over to them? They must choose another! Depart, into peace!"
Puabana's spirit form dissipated, as she was released once again into the tranquillity beyond the veil. The demons chittered and chattered, muttered and murmured.
And suddenly, Dumuzid's wretched form appeared before them.
The plump, overfed consort-king had, in death, become as a gaunt skeleton. And, unlike Puabana whose strength had been apparent in the outward form of her spirit, Dumuzid was a dim flickering wraith. Even now, he cowered in fear.
"Mistress!" he cried, weeping to see Inanna. "My goddess... my beloved queen... save me... save me!"
"So they have slain you," Inanna said to him, her voice thick with grief.