Greetings! I'm PrimroseCatnip, I'd ask kindly if you give nice and fair judgement to my story. This is my first time writing on this site so I'd like positive criticism please!
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The dawn light shone dimly through the velvet curtains that covered the window, although the window seemed to have a slight opening gap, a bit of breeze pushed the curtains, providing a bit more light to the fairly pitch black room. The ray's of the sun caressed the face of a young maiden whom laid resting on what appeared to be a king sized bed. Soft fabric of a black-coated blanket covered the maiden's body as she had been resting with ease, only to have been awakened by the sun tickling her face. She sat up in her bed, stretching her arms and giving off a small yawn, rubbing her eyes to hopefully help wake her up more. With little to no effort she pushed the blankets off her body revealing her nightgown; it bore many laces entwined around her gown, seeming to hold it up for her. It was not like any plain ordinary nightgown... far from it! It was caked with layers upon layers of royal purple and gold. Indicating that she was a flourished young lady.
With another soft yawn she stood from the bed and made her way across the obscenely large room, as she had looked around it did not seem to bare much furnishing. It held a few dressers, a long and tall wardrobe and some paintings on the wall, which were hard to make out in the semi-dark... other than that the room seemed far too big with little to nothing in it. She made her way to the bathroom and turned on the light, finding herself staring directly at a mirror. Gently caressing her oddly pale-skinned face with her fingers, she turned the sink's faucet on and began to ran warm water, cupping her hands together to gather some of the water to splash on her face in hope to perk her up more; from upon awakening she had a dead expression. Having turned the faucet off to cease the water, she bore her eyes into the mirror once more, gazing upon her features.
A beauty beyond comparison! It was no mistaking her true natural essence that radiated from her complexion. Although she had an unnatural pale-skin she had many features that seemed to compliment it well. Soft pink lips when caressed made you swoon with ecstasy, gorgeous baby blue eyes that appeared to be deep pools of the ocean. Fairly long straight blonde hair that dangled over her frame; bangs covering partial of her forehead. Her face alone was not the only beautiful feature, so was her entire body! Decently rounded breasts stood firm upon her chest, they appeared to be D-sized. She was fairly skinny but had mouth-watering curves that danced across her delicate frame. Practically screaming model material if she had ever pursued that as a career.
Sighing bitterly as she had been gazing upon her self for well over five minutes she decided to take a nice warm shower. With no hesitation she began to strip from her nightgown, not really caring that she left it on the floor as she had made her way to the shower. Obviously the shower was not small, it had a lot of room to move in which made it easy for her to walk around if she had wanted to escape the water for a few minutes or so. Turning on the water it started out ice cold, resulting in her taking a few steps back before she leaned forward to turn the other faucet to make the water warm. Sighing with relief as she had stood beneath the water that splashed against her pale skin, the warmth of the water that caressed her body had began to make her shiver with excitement. Enjoying the warmth of the water as it covered her head-to-toe, drenching across all parts of her, she began her normal process of washing her hair and then washing her body.. Enjoying the shower at its fullest.
Having spent almost thirty-five minutes she was finally finished, grabbing a towel and drying herself off from the excess water that remained as well as drying her long beautiful blonde hair.
The towel and nightgown was tossed into a hamper that was seen far off in the corner of the bathroom, one of the maids will get it later for her. She danced across her dark room, still naked from the shower as she had made her way towards the tall wardrobe. Opening the doors and revealing a fine collection of dresses to her leisure. Many different kinds of dresses could be seen inside the wardrobe but today she felt like going simple instead of elegant, picking out a white dress that was covered in pretty flowers of all kinds of colors; a pink blouse covering the top part of the lacy dress.
Reaching down and opening the bottom of the wardrobe, revealing a few collections of shoes, grabbing a nice pair of pinkish-blue coated flats. It was a matter of moments before she was fully dressed and was no longer naked, twirling around in the dress seeming very pleased by her decision. Finally she was ready to leave her room and thus she did so, opening the door and closing it swiftly behind her as she now stood in a long hallway, she began to walk down the hallway to the main entrance of the home.
The hallway alone screamed rich-incarnated, the floor had a endlessly long rug that brimmed with red and gold, along the walls of the hallway was even more paintings and perched just beside the walls were small tables that held vases of many different colors, some containing very beautiful and unmistakable flowers. As she had made her way towards the main entrance she spotted one of the butlers attending to what appeared to be roses in one of the vases. She stopped momentarily and smiled brightly at the butler, his gaze lifted from the flowers to the young lady who stood before him and he smiled warmly.
He placed the watering can on the table gently, turning to face her, with his right hand placed over his chest as he bowed to her presence. "Good morning my lady. How are you feeling today?" As he stood right back up with both his hands at his side.
"A good morning to you as well my dear friend, Sebastian. I'm feeling, well, not faint." She laughed a bit nervously. Crossing her arms over her chest having felt a small shiver. Sebastian sighed softly but returned another warm smile.
"That is good to hear." He reached over and touched the side of her neck, there did not appear to be any marks, meaning they had fully healed. She feels the pain but there is no marks for proof...
Primrose shook her head softly.
"I have not the slightest clue why I keep feeling so faint all the time, it is as though my energy is being sucked away from me by something and I do not know where it's happening let alone why it is!" She sighed bitterly. "I'm always feeling pain in my neck but there have been other areas that have been causing me issues as well, like my arms, legs and even the area above my chest." She looked at him with concern. "I feel pain there however, it eventually goes away, only to return again the next day."
Sebastian looks at her with soft eyes, thinking to himself. ('It appears she has no idea what is going on, I can not blame her, yet even I cannot fathom why she was brought to this household. A mere common girl from the streets brought here? I find suspicious at the least. I feel it is my obligation to seek out the truth for her sake.. after all.. whenever I see my lady my heart trembles with delight, my desire for her is strong-willed.')
Primrose tilted her head at him with curiosity, waving her hand in his face repeatedly. "Hey... are you awake? You seemed to have been lost in thought, are you alright?" She reached over and with her hand and touched his forehead. "Well you don't seem to have a fever." Perking a brow at him. Sebastian laughed softly.
"Sorry my lady, from time to time I space out... completely lost in my own thoughts. Forgive me." He looked down at the watch that was around the wrist of his right hand. "Oh dear me, I must attend to the rest of the flowers, hurry on towards the dinning hall. Matilda is making your favorite breakfast for you, hurry while it's still warm." As he grabbed the watering can on the table and rushed off in the distance of the hallway.
