Thank you all for the wonderful reviews in the edited entry of the first 10 chapters of this story. I read all your comments and felt a little confused with some of them.
In my mind, the fact that in the first delivery the names of each character are put in front of their dialogues, like it or not, did not felt like such a strong reason for either love or hate the story. So after some thought, I decided to not consider those as critics, it is just as a way of preference.
That being said, I went thru the next 10 chapters and modified the dialogue style, so now is up to you to tell me which one is more comfortable for you to read in your comments bellow. I take everything you give me as a constructive criticism!
Of course, writing in this new way takes me longer so I am sorry I took long to bring you this. The next 10 chapters (from 21 to 30) are already finished, but in the old style, so it would depend on your opinions for either have the next part reviewed before posting (which makes me take longer) or not.
Enjoy!
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Chapter 11
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It was almost 4 in the morning, but Magna was wearing a business suit and was more awake than anyone else. Elaine walked into the living room first, followed by Caliope and Amra holding hands. Pronab left to his apartment a few floors below.
"There is a reason why I live in a tall building, Caliope... I don't like creatures crawling on my window... Magna, is everything ready?"
"Yes Madame, the guest's room is ready... how long will Miss Woodward stay?"
"Indefinitely" said Amra without even looking at her.
Magna was visibly not happy, but she nodded and picked up Elaine's bag, then offered to lead Caliope to her room. Amra just shook his head and motioned to Magma.
"Thank you for your kindness but I will take care of her now Mag."
"I told you not to call me like that..."
"And I told you both to stop acting like children... Magna, thank you, let's get things ready to go to work earlier today, I don't feel like resting, and we better take care of business" Elaine's voice raised above theirs.
"Yes Madame, I will have everything ready for you. Coffee?"
"Yes please."
As Magna disappeared into the next room, Caliope turned to Elaine and asked nervously:
"Does Magna know who you all are?"
"She does, she is very valuable to me Caliope dear, she is a fallen Angel, bound to my service, and has been with me over 50 years..."
"...and that is why she doesn't like Amra?"
"She doesn't like him much, it's true, and I am sorry, but they need to stay far from each other in order to be in peace, Amrafel please, don't provoke her like that."
"I do not care... much... just keep her far from me..."
"Funny... I hired Caliope for that..." finished Elaine with a chuckle.
Caliope sighed and nodded, she got why Magna was important to her. The reason why Magna respected Elaine so much and not Amra was still unknown for her but they worked well together. Amra lifted her chin to make her look at him, she smiled shyly and quickly relaxed. The tall building, surrounded by steel and glass, made her feel safer. Being with her Angel made her feel she had nothing to fear.
Amra took her to the guest's room; soft lights made her feel calm. Caliope put her bag on top of one of the chairs and sat on the edge of the bed. Amra kneeled next to her and rubbed her hands with his.
"Don't worry about anything, we will take this slowly... now rest some, I already have stolen too many hours of your precious sleep..."
"I am supposed to come to work in a few hours..."
"There is no need, I won't be too far, just rest, I will see you when you wake up..."
Caliope was in no position to argue, she was visibly tired, and the bed was so comfortable it drew her to rest. Amra kissed the top of her head and walked out, closing the door behind him. She glimpsed around the room then crawled to the center of the bed, nodding off.
Her dreams were chaotic with wars, darkness, and crawling creatures searching for her. When she opened her eyes she was sweating and agitated, she sat on her bed, gasping and regaining control.
"I should have prevented that, I am sorry..."
Caliope searched around the room and found Elaine sitting in a corner. She was looking at her with sadness in her eyes.
"I am sorry, I did not meant to scare you... I promised Amra I would be taking care of you..."
"Did I slept much?"
"It is 7pm, I would say you slept quite a bit..." she nodded then smiled "nothing to worry, being with Amra is not easy, but you are adjusting quite well, and he is controlling himself amazingly..."
"For a moment I thought... you were going to try to tell me to stay away from him..."
"Oh no! Of course not Caliope... I only want the best for him and you... love for us is not a choice, when it happens, it happens only that time... I would never take away that from him, or you..."
"Thank you, it is nice to know that... and you answering all my questions, you have been too kind to me..." finally she smiled at her, feeling more relaxed.
"I enjoy my life in this Earth so much, this new situation has Us all uncomfortable..."
"...is Amra... ok?"
"Since he got here he has been dormant... he was filled with apathy to the situation itself, it is not easy to draw the attention of an Ancient one, they think different, they act different from the rest of Us, including the Archangels... We are all more used to dealing with humans, while they aren't, they are the last resource... And since he met you, well, he has been changing a lot."
"How did he changed?"
"The first day you met him, he came to my study and asked me how were the investigations going, he never did that before, he was always in his room, meditating... we rarely spoke much unless I needed to ask permissions to do something radical... He is the authority here now... You woke up his interest and I did not thought it well then, but I knew it was something in you... he never was interested in controlling how his presence affects others around him, the time standing still or moving too fast, that is all natural for him, and it took me a while to understand what was happening to me when I was around him... Suddenly he was out of his room during night, near me and Magna, watching Us, making Us quite nervous actually" she admitted chuckling "and what he was really doing was learning his effect on Us and controlling it..."
"...and he did all that for me?" Caliope was wrapping herself up in her real place now as being Amra's love interest.
"Yes, he was not interested in doing much until he met you, and I don't think he knew well he caused a certain effect on people around him... you have to understand, he has been here for over 20 years, and he never did anything... I tried to take him out, show him the earth and learn to love it as we love it... trust me, I was quite excited after he started to show interest..."
Caliope was now smiling and blushing "I feel flattered and overwhelmed... I don't know how but I felt drawn to him since I met him..."
Elaine nodded "and he felt drawn to you as well, he has heard about 'love' but never felt it, of course, he was never down to any Earth long enough... if something happened that required him to be there, only his presence was enough for many things to be solved... but things are not the same now, whatever the dark Angels had made to erase any trace of our Archangel is giving them enough courage to continue with their plans... Amra is now actually worried, because he has you here now, and he can't afford to lose this battle..."
"How can I help? I wish I could in some way..."
"You are helping by just being with him, and that is something you both want anyway... You are the one that gave him a reason to want things done, to move, search, find... he is not down here to just find out what has happened and prevent something bad is set loose, he is now here to make sure that nothing happens because if it does, he can lose you..."
"I feel so small in all of this... situation..."
"Don't you understand how important is your role? You are the force that drives him... without you who knows how long I would have to be waiting for him to get involved, and who knows how much I would have to be fighting to know what is going on really... always without his real interest..."
Caliope smiled "and that is exactly the overwhelming part... but I understand... and I take this serious too... trust me... I might not be fully aware of the magnitude of things but I get an idea and I want to help any way I can..."
"And you can count on me for anything you need..."
"I wanted to ask you, why is that you put me dealing with certain tasks that I thought you would deal more personally? Choosing charity actions seemed very unlike to what an assistant would be doing..."