Thank you all for your comments and support on my first 2 deliveries on this long story I have been working on.
To those who ask me to find an editor, believe me I've tried! I went to search for some editors in Lit's program page and I just haven't got any luck finding one. Those few I contacted and were kind enough to reply, have told me that editing a long story like the one I have made so far it would be like doing a job for free, and they would agree to do so if there was some sort of compensation, which to be honest I agree is deserved but I just cant afford it.
That being said, I have found a friend who said he will look at it and try to help me but on his free time, He got a look at the first 10 chapters and I am re-posting them now with his revised version, which I also twitched a bit as well.
Again, thank you for your support and I love critics that are positive about characters and situations, it helps me implement them in future chapters. Enjoy!
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The Awakening
Chapter 1
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Caliope was walking down the street, heading towards her new job. She had to be there right on time, as her new boss was a woman of impeccable fame and schedules had to be strictly followed.
She stopped right in front of a tall building, and only then realized the neighborhood she was in. It was the business district, and her new job was to simply look out the house of her employer's son, who she was told had a rare mental illness. Her look reflected her puzzled mind; she looked down at the paper then up to the tall, scary building. It might have taken her a few seconds more than she was supposed to take, as the security guard walked towards her.
Guard: May I help you young lady?
She chuckled and tried to hold her laughter, which didn't seem to make the guard very happy.
Caliope: I am sorry Sir, but I think someone gave me the wrong address. I am supposed to meet a Miss Elaine Clark In her house here?
The guard looked a bit shocked yet nodded and suddenly became polite. He showed her the way inside the building and offered her a cup of coffee once they were waiting for confirmation at the reception desk.
A small door opened and a very skinny old lady came through it, nodding to the guard and then to her.
Guard: Evening Magna.
Magna: Evening Gerard, thank you, I will take her to the Madame now. Hello, you must be Caliope, am I correct?
Caliope: yes, that is I, how did you know?
Magna: come, follow me, you are just in time, and the Madame was not waiting for anyone else but you.
The old lady grinned as she leaded Caliope through the door she came in, and towards the service area where both went up on the elevator to the 15th floor. So far Caliope's first impressions of the building and people were old and grey.
When the elevator stopped, the old lady pulled out a key from her pocket, inserted it into a special place on the panel, and only then, the doors opened. A very elegant yet simple living room welcomed both, as Magna offered to take her coat and hold her bag. Then she lead Caliope towards a bigger living room, as apparently, the one before was a sitting room for service people only. "Fancy..." she thought.
Caliope didn't want to make an impression as a dumb street girl, she kept her eyes looking to the place she would take a seat, and once there, her eyes focused on her hands resting softly on her knees. Crossed legs elegantly. A little bell rang, and a wooden bird came out from some place in the room. That made her look up and to her surprise, a tall, dark haired elegant business woman was walking towards her. Caliope stood up quickly, taking care for her skirt to stay in place.
Elaine Clark: I love sharp-on-time people, good first impression Miss Woodward.
Caliope: Thank you, Miss Clark, a pleasure to meet you.
Elaine Clark: Please, take a seat, and tell me a little bit more about you, like for example, your name...
Caliope: yes, it is written with a "C" and just one "L" on purpose. *smiling softly*
Elaine Clark: that indeed got me curious. *chuckling graciously* tell me why did your mother pick such an interesting name.
Even if she thought this was such a silly subject, Caliope decided to humor her new employer. To her surprise, she realized that no one ever asked her before about her name. She also noticed that Miss Cark was a very classy lady, around her late 40's but so well preserved, beautiful skin, kind voice, she could be even older.
Caliope: I picked my own name Miss Clark, My parents both died of an accident when I was very young, an unfortunate classic story, and I went through many foster homes, many first and last names. When I turned 18, I wanted a name of my own, written as I wanted, as my own personal statement, and that is how Caliope was born.
Elaine Clark: I must admit I am quite fond of your name; I like it, and don't get me wrong, but it's mostly why I had chosen you among other several resumes on my desk. I like a unique personality.
This caused Caliope to laugh nervously, imitated by Miss Clark, who realized the time was running fast. She called back Magna and as she was standing, both ladies picked up their purses and walked towards the door.
Elaine Clark: Make yourself comfortable Miss Woodward, my son rarely comes out of his room, his name is Amra, please assist him if he needs something, he will return to his room as soon as he gets what he wants.
Caliope: I will Miss, have a good day and you as well Lady Magna.
Miss Clark and Magna both smiled and the elevator doors closed. Caliope was a bit scared now as she was alone in a very unfamiliar environment, with a stranger who she did not know yet.