Really long Author's Note:
So, I went back and forth and back and forth about posting this. First warning: there's no sex in it. There's some pretty interesting (if I say so myself) Alpha behavior and lots of little hints about the world I am trying to build. But it's a snippet. It's barely anything.
Second warning: if you've paid very close attention to "The Mountain" chapters that have already been posted, you'll notice this snippet doesn't even quite line up with what's happened before.
The thing is, the reason I haven't posted anything in so long (other than life, the universe, etc.) is that I was struggling majorly with how to continue this story. And it's partly a rookie writer mistake to backtrack instead of forging ahead, but I kept coming back to the early chapters to try to figure out why the ending wasn't working. And that led to a long exercise in figuring out the backstory of the world and the characters-the "why" and "how" regarding the takeover of the island and the connection between humans and the warriors (because, they're not human, right? At one point, I wasn't really sure.)
That all led to me re-imagining the timeline of the story. The islanders, in the original version, have been trapped on the island for 20+ years. At around 26, it's the only way of life Lucy can really remember. In the tweaked version of the story I'm working on now, the islanders have been trapped for about five years. Lucy remembers the mainland. She's been there. Memories of the world outside the island are strong. And if Lucy has been to the mainland, Warder must have been, too, right? Well, that's where my mind went and I realized...they've met. They had to have crossed paths. Because way back in that first chapter, Warder has this little internal speech about fate and fortune and luck. And in that moment, he's almost remembering that he knows this girl. That she intrigued him once before on a day where he was too focused on the mission in front of him to truly notice her. And he isn't going to make that mistake again.
It's just a tiny moment, this snippet. But I think - I
think
- it fixes a lot of story issues for me.
The final chapters are still probably going to be rough. I'm not going to go back and rewrite. I'm just going to forge ahead. You deserve a finished story. Hopefully a good one, but a finished one. Still, this figuring out process has been painful. I've sent three version of Chapter Eight to beta readers. NONE OF THEM WORKED. I'm making painful, painstaking progress on a new version and I really want to post it soon. Even if it isn't perfect, just to give it to you and be done with it. You can tell me what all is wrong with it. I promise I won't cry (where you can see me.)
But I'm really only writing this, at this point, for those of you who have let me know that you've fallen in love with this story. For the ones who are mad at Warder or heartbroken for Elias or rooting for Lucy. (Or in love with Warder and mad at Lucy. Whatever.) And I figured, if you love the story (which ohmigod thank you), you'd probably enjoy seeing this tiny piece of it, even if it isn't what you were promised.
I'm still keeping that other promise. Chapter Eight is coming. In all its messy, info-dump glory. There will be a pretty hot sex scene at the end, so...
Do they even allow author's notes this long? I'm about to find out. I guess. When I submit this. (Or not. If you're reading this, I did! And they do!)
There are potential spoilers in this snippet, but probably not many since the clues won't really make sense until you get all that info dump that's coming in Chapter Eight about who the mountain people are and where they came from...and a lot of other things that I hope will be pretty cool, but might be a big giant let down.
This takes place about five years before the events in the main story, about five years before Lucy and Warder _really_ meet, and exactly two days before the warriors take over the island.
Okay, I think the A.N. is officially longer than the snippet.
Love, love, love you for reading!
_Marileigh_
Warder walked into the shop, conscious of the way his body filled the space. It was moments like this that had caused the rift between his people and the humans. The world was not made for them and the urge to tear it down and rebuild it for themselves-he understood it.
He stood on a knife's edge now, trying to decide if understanding was enough to spur him to action. If the small, insignificant lives of these people were enough to stop him.
There were children screaming, racing around the shop. They had instinct enough to give him a wide berth, but they took less care with the shop displays along the walls. One of them flung out his arm, clumsy in a large, puffy jacket and swept a shelf of small, be-ribboned boxes onto the floor.
"Evan! Ollie! Freeze right there." A harried woman came and swept up the smaller of the children. She ignored the boxes, crushing one underfoot.
He didn't want to be here. Shouldn't be here, except he had heard that the shop owner had a boat to lend-the only boat for miles along the coastline that his own people would be unlikely to track. The bakery had a tiny outpost on the island. He needed to inspect the place. He needed to do it quietly, without attracting the attention that would come with commandeering a boat. His rank would make the acquisition easy. It was the follow-up that worried him. His father-his commander-would call him onto the carpet, requesting a full accounting of his travels.
So, instead, he was here, in this ridiculous, cramped bakery, planning to talk the owner out of his delivery boat.
He knew the owner was the white-haired man behind the counter. Right now, he was sweating while trying to determine which particular luridly-colored cookie a young girl was screaming for. Her face was pressed against the glass while she jabbed at it with one fat, sticky finger.
Warder sighed heavily and reached over her head to take a number. He stepped back and nearly crushed a young woman kneeling on the floor behind him. She was gathering up the boxes-flavored teas-that the children has upset, frowning at one that had been crushed beyond repair. For a moment, he thought she must work in the shop and he wondered if he could talk her out of the boat. But when she was done replacing the boxes, she retrieved a paper number from the pocket of her gray wool coat, fingering it idly as she tried to stand out of the way of the milling crowd.
She glanced up, as if she could feel his eyes on her, and he held her gaze for a split second before focusing on a table across the room. He had been staring too long, but there was something odd about the girl. For a moment, he had imagined that he could smell her amidst the sugar-and-sweat smell of the bakery-the tempting, rare scent of an omega. But she was clearly human. And he knew he was imagining things to try to block out his discomfort at this crowded, noisy,
human
place.
A group of women crowded at the counter near the window giggled, earning his attention. They were staring at him openly, lust on their faces. Humans often thought him handsome. He usually found it annoying.