This is a work of fiction. None of the characters are underage or any age. You don't know them, no matter how much you think you do, because they are not real people. I made them up.
What I am really looking for here is feedback. I want to know if it entertained. If it did not, I would like to know why. Was it incongruities? Was it unrealistic size? Was it that girls would never say that? I just want to know if something popped you out of the story. I'm trying to become a better writer and this kind of feedback is helpful. And please VOTE!
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Two days before the Sunday wedding was the bachelor party. Happily, it was just dinner and a movie, though all the waitresses at the restaurant came by to kiss the groom before he was 'off the market'. The rest of us even got one or two kisses or hugs as the father of the groom, best man, groomsman, etc. When the ticket was brought, there was a special note for the father of the groom which I read, then tucked in my pocket. It seemed to me, at that moment, that the more I was getting, the more was available. After the movie, the new hero movie, my favorite genre, we all went home, well, except me. I pulled out the note.
It read: Father of the Groom, I find you hot and you kiss really well. I am Vicki, the Latino waitress whose ass you felt up during the kiss. I'd really like to get to know you better. I get off in an hour and I heard you are going to a movie with the boys. My address is below. I live alone. Come visit and I will give you my number too.
The address was on the way home and was an apartment in one of the old homes in town. Many owners of the old homes had split those homes into two, three and up to six apartments depending on the bathrooms and size. This particular apartment was in a better area in town. I watched for a while, the shades were open after all. Only Vicki seemed to be in the place, watching television. I was taking quite a chance, but I remembered Vicki. I'd seen her before. She was smokin hot, with a bodacious body, a Latino accent, long black hair and a beautiful Latino tan.
I knocked lightly on the door and she looked through the spy hole, then let me in. "Hi daddy, come on in." she said softly. She was wearing a tiny skirt and a midriff baring shirt that stretched across her breasts. White socks on her feet and a ribbon in her hair topped off the illusion of a little girl, though I knew she was at least eighteen because of liquor served at the restaurant. I stepped inside and she closed the door. She flipped a security lock and a chain and shot the deadbolt home.
"I'll take your coat, daddy," she said and then hung it on a peg in the hall. She pressed against me in a hug then grasped my hand and pulled me to the living area. "I'm so glad you finally came, daddy. I've wanted you to see my new place." she gushed and bounced and pulled me along. Just before the living area was a pile of women's shoes, maybe five or six pairs. "We don't wear shoes in the apartment daddy. I'll get them for you!"
She knelt down and removed my shoes, her knees spread and her shirt gapping on the top to show her firm young breasts. When she slipped off the first shoe, her skirt lifted on my toe and showed a lack of panties. By now, I was ready to go. She stood up and pulled me into the room. She hugged my arm and pressed my wrist and knuckles against her groin lightly, "What do you think daddy, isn't it divine?"
"It is, baby," I said, flipping my hand around to stroke her upper thigh, "Is this the whole place, baby?"
She giggled and said, "No, silly daddy. There is a little kitchen, bathroom and my bedroom."
"Show me, baby," I said, then added a double entendre, "Daddy wants to see it all." I moved my hand to the bare skin of her lower back and gently caressed it as she walked me forward. The kitchen was tiny with two cabinets and a bookshelf for food. It had a three quarter refrigerator and no oven, though there was a microwave and stove top with two burners. The bathroom was pretty normal, though it only contained a shower, no bathtub. "Oh baby, you like baths so much," I said with the sound of disappointment.
"I know daddy, but I'll get by." Then she led me to her bedroom door. Inside there was a small dresser and a queen sized bed. On the nearby nightstand was a sex toy, I am sure it was left there on purpose.
I grabbed her hand and marched her into the bedroom, "What's this, baby? Is this what you are up to in this apartment?"
"No daddy, I mean, well, it is mine, but please daddy, I miss you so much," she said.
"You know what this means, baby," I said.
"Daddy, please," she said then a moment later, "You're right daddy, the paddle is in the drawer."
She stood next to my legs as I sat on the bed and pulled out the paddle. I saw many other toys in there as well. Everything from nipple clips to handcuffs to wax sticks. She lay across my lap when I pulled it free and pulled her skirt up. Her ass was exquisite. It was perfectly rounded and her pussy peeked out from between her beautiful legs. I rubbed the paddle across her skin and sighed.
"I know how much you dislike punishing me, daddy," she said and I swatted her the first time to a minor reaction. "I will try to be a better girl if you make me regret being a bad girl." I swatted her harder and she groaned, "sorry daddy." I swatted her three more times then rubbed her ass.
"Does my little girl think she can do better now?" I asked.
"Oh daddy, yes, you always make me want to change. But daddy, now that I've been punished, how can I make it up to you?" she said. "I know, I've seen you watching those shows where the girls show their boobies, shall I show you mine daddy?" and she stripped off her shirt in one quick motion. Her tits were also perfect, at least C cups with dollar sized areolas and erect nipples.
"You know that's not enough baby," and she hung her head and started unbuckling my pants, "I know what to do daddy, you can use me like you used to use mommy before she went away. Let me do this for you daddy."
I took her face between my hands and pulled her to me, "See, you can be a good girl, mija." then I kissed her lips and she whimpered as I pinched her tits. She finished unbuckling me and tugged my pants until I lifted and let her tug them down to my ankles. "Take my feet out of them, baby," I said and pushed her skirt off as she did. Then I rubbed her sex as she held her ass in the air for me. "Stand up and let me see you now." and she stood before me. Her flesh was flushed as was her cheeks and I caressed, pinched and probed as she stood before me.
"Oh daddy, yes," she said, "It's been so long." then as I licked her nipples and fingered her, she shuddered and came, almost losing her feet. I held her up and lifted one leg before I licked her clean. She was almost ready to orgasm again when I stopped and lay her down on the bed. I spread her legs wide and moved up to her then pushed inside her. "Oh... oh... oh daddy." she cried and groaned as I pushed inside her. "Harder daddy, do me harder, oh bigger than ever..."
I began to pump in and out of her then slowed and stopped. I moved my face to hers and said, "Alex, say it for me, just once."
"Oh Alex, you feel so good. Take me, I have been alone for a long time," she said and I kissed her then began to move inside her.