This is a plot thread I first saw from Hooked1957. I then saw it again by other authors and decided to take a run at it. I am not trying to rewrite or edit anyone else's story, this is purely my take on the plot line.
One of the things I am getting lots of comments about is too fast an ending. I did that because my first stories were dragged out too much. I will try to balance it with this one.
Thanks again to my editor Kenji, he does a fantastic job every time I need it.
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I was on my way home from work with a bad feeling in the pit of my stomach. I was not sure why, but I had a feeling I was about to find out. It had just turned five o'clock on a Friday night. This was unusual for me, as work was my own business and I liked to spend time in the office alone on a Friday night, making sure everything was up to date and ready for a big day on Saturday.
I'm Mark Ashworth and my business is Ashworth Auto's. I had started life as a motor mechanic when I was sixteen. I opened my own garage when I was twenty, specialising in high-end European cars. There were a lot of those on the road in our county, but the only mechanic was over 150 miles away. Yes, it was expensive to set up, but I had a friendly bank manager who understood my business plan and I was a very gifted mechanic, with some collateral left to me by my grandfather.
All the European cars were driven by wealthy individuals. They came to me because I had a good reputation. It wasn't long until they started asking me to source cars, usually secondhand, for their sons and daughters when they started to drive. I quickly added a secondhand car business to my mechanics garage, and then a body repair shop after that. I was now thirty-eight, had four locations in the county, and owned a business that was conservatively worth eight million dollars.
I was coming home early because my wife, Hannah, said she needed me home early today. She had a big proposal and she wanted to talk to me about it. Hannah was 35 and we had been married for fourteen years. We met because her dad, John, had asked me to source a car for her for her twentieth birthday. Sparks flew between us instantly. The day she collected her car, she asked me out. We were married a year later, and now had two boys; James, twelve, and Martin, ten.
Hannah's dad, John, was an accountant, but was a really nice guy. Hannah was a partner in the accountancy practice. He helped me a lot in business and had a lot of time for me. Hannah's mum, Stephanie, called me a 'grease monkey' and made it obvious that she thought her daughter could have done better than me.
Hannah had an older brother, Alexander (called Alex) and a younger sister, Susan. Alex never married, and it was clear he had no intention of doing so. Susan was married to a lawyer, named Barclay. He fancied himself as a bit of a shark, but in reality, he scratched out a living as a trial lawyer. Hannah's mother thought he was the greatest son-in-law ever.
Susan had something wrong with her when in her early teens. I never knew exactly what, but she had to have an operation, the net result of which was she was incapable of having children. As a result, our two boys were the only grandchildren. This seemed to annoy Stephanie, but Susan was getting depressed, as all her mother ever talked about was babies.
Hannah was worried about her sister. I had suggested adoption at a family gathering, but Stephanie exploded, saying that she wanted her grandchildren to be biologically hers. The next suggestion by John was surrogacy. Susan asked how that would work, and I explained IVF as best I could. Again, Stephanie screwed her nose up, saying it was too clinical and asked who would donate the eggs.
Later that night, Hannah and I discussed Susan. I suggested she could donate eggs for the IVF. Hannah asked how it would work, and I said I would research it.
It turned out harvesting eggs wasn't that difficult, and I brought the information home. This way, Stephanie could get her biological children and all would be good with the world.
That discussion was about three months ago, and it had come up randomly about every two to three weeks since.
The reason I had a sick feeling in my stomach was because Hannah had been a little 'off' for the last week to ten days. I couldn't put my finger on it, but she was texting back and forth with someone. Usually, she was very open with her phone, but this was secretive. We also hadn't had sex for over a week. She had given me blowjobs, but no penetration. That was very unusual for Hannah.
Our house was on a four-acre plot. The land had been left to me by my grandfather when I was eleven. I built a house on it, soon after we married. My plot was part of a fifteen-acre holding that my grandfather had maintained as a market garden business. He had left the house and one acre to my older brother. The remaining ten acres had been sold to a housing development and the profits were in a trust fund for the benefit of the wider family, including the education for our children.
The house could not be seen from the road, so I turned up the drive to find several cars parked. I knew my bad feeling was justified when I saw John and Stephanie's car, Susan and Barclay's car and a few others I recognised, as more distant family members. I could feel a whole bunch of BS coming my way, and they were going to pretend it was caviar.
I parked my car around the side of the house, and steeled myself for the upcoming storm as I entered the house.
I deliberately came through the garage door, knowing I would not be heard. I stood in the utility room and listened, but all I could hear were muffled voices. I always carried a voice recorder in my pocket. It was something John taught me to do when I went into a meeting, so I could write my own notes after it was finished. Out of habit, I switched it on then placed it back in my pocket, safe in the knowledge it would catch most of the conversation that I knew was coming.
I took a deep breath and pushed the door open and entered the kitchen. There were eight people sitting in the nook, just off the kitchen. Hannah, John and Stephanie, were in the three-seat sofa. Susan and Barclay were in the two-seater, and Alex was in a single recliner, while Joan and Karen, two aunts, were on chairs that had been carried in from the dining room. There was an armchair, that had been moved from my home office, left empty. It had been set so it was surrounded by Alex and the two aunts, and was directly opposite Hannah, John and Stephanie. The ambush had clearly been set.
As I closed the door, Hannah said, "Come on in, Mark, and sit down. We are just having a chat about a couple of things and wanted your input."
I thought to myself, "'Wanted your input,' you mean I'm about to be told something and I am expected to have no choice!"
I went to the nook, but turned one of the stools from the breakfast bar around and sat on it. I wanted the dynamic of the room to change, and sitting on a high stool not only set me separate from everyone else, it also made me higher, meaning they had to look up at me. I didn't speak, but stared Hannah in the eye, and ensured there was a lot of irritation showing on my face. She flared red, as she realised what I was doing, but could not hold my gaze.
I slowly looked around the room. John and Alex would not look at me; Stephanie had a look of triumph on her face, looking like she was about to achieve a burning objective. Barclay looked me in the eye and smirked, like he was about to get one over on me and Susan had a smile on her face, that had not been there for some time.
Hannah sat quietly expecting me to speak. I didn't. After I gazed around the room, I kept staring at her and she tried everything to avoid my gaze. I thought to myself, "I can wait as long as you," and remained silent. This was turning into a battle and she was starting to get angry with me.
Eventually, Stephanie broke the silence when she said, "We have been discussing Susan's problem and we think we have a solution."
I didn't respond to Stephanie and kept my eyes firmly on Hannah, who was now squirming under my gaze.
Eventually, Hannah looked up at me. "Mark, as you know, Susan can't have children and you had investigated the option of surrogacy and we think it is a good option. Mum wanted the eggs to be biologically within the family, so over the last few weeks, we have been discussing the option of me being the surrogate."
I raised my hand to stop her. "You discussed this over the last few weeks? Why did you feel the need to exclude me from these discussions? Obviously, this decision will have a major impact on the boys and me, I would have thought we should have been in on the ground floor with this."
Stephanie piped in, "What do you mean? This has nothing to do with you. Just hold her hand and smile."
I took a deep breath and spoke to Stephanie, without taking my eyes off Hannah. "Of course, it will have an impact on me and the boys. Their mother will be in an IVF clinic, then she will be pregnant, meaning there are things she will not be able to do for them like carry them to bed. She struggled with both previous pregnancies and finished up in hospital for one month both times, with high blood pressure. She will have scans and time in hospital to give birth, which will be taken out of their lives. She will also take time to recover. It takes a certain degree of selfishness to not grasp how disruptive this will be to my family."
My biggest concern was when I said, "IVF clinic." Hannah's eyes flicked around the room, Barclay had a smirk on his face and Susan flinched. What was I missing?
Stephanie, obviously, was relishing putting me in the picture. "There will be no IVF clinic. My grandchild will be conceived in love and passion, not in a test tube."
The lightbulb went on! This was the ambush, and the others were here to keep me under control.
I could feel the anger flair on my face as I screamed, "Hannah, explain NOW!"
She looked around at me. I could see fear in her eyes. The conversation had not gone as she had planned, and now the truth was out and she had lost control of the conversation.
She said, "IVF is not a good option, I went off the pill two months ago, and my period came three weeks ago, and will come properly in another week. The doctors say I will be fertile in about two to three weeks. Barclay was going to move in here for a week over my fertile time and at the end of the week, I should be pregnant. Then Susan and Barclay can adopt a child which is biologically related to both of them."
By this time, I was standing right in front of Hannah. I felt Alex's hand on my shoulder. I tried to shrug it off, but he had a very firm grip on me. I heard him say, "Hold on, Mark. Please don't do anything stupid."