I know I had some problems with tense. I hope it doesn't ruin the story for you but this is the kind of critique I am hoping for. Enjoy. Encourage me to write more
Walking backwards through the party I bumped into her, she was absolutely stunning, instead of frowning she was smiling, she had beautiful blue eyes and without taking my eyes away I was dying to look down at her little dress and see her legs and heels. She held my arm steadying herself and as I instantly apologized. She said I was very bad and could make it up to her by giving her one of the drinks I was carrying. She looked back as she walked away, my wife's drink in her hand, and smiled but I was looking at her long legs under her sexy black mini-dress because she was wearing glossy nude tights. She gave me a kinky little kick of a heel as she noticed my eyes. I felt a buzz in my pants as my eyes returned to her smile. I wanted to pull her long blonde locks away from her neck and kiss it, devour her head to toe. Wow! My wife had arrived and noticed I was dumbstruck.
'Where's my drink?'
'I, Oh, I knocked that girl and she asked for it.'
I looked across the room to the hot mystery woman now surrounded now by men vying for her attention. The way she flicked her hair and included them all in her gaze was intoxicating. She glanced over and winked at us raising her drink. I blushed but my wife was fuming,
'You're an asshole, you know that Peter?' I tried to apologise.
'Get me a drink' she said as she stormed off.
We sat at a table alone in the steamy atmosphere. I was still trying to explain,
'Honey, you look so wonderful.'
'I made the effort tonight.' She moaned.
'I know you did.' I knew couldn't win, she was so angry.
She did look stunning. She wasn't as tall and slender as the blonde woman but her face was just as beautiful, her dark eyes, her hair tied up on her head, and when she dressed up she could be so sexy. Her dress tonight was a Spanish import. A tiered skirt, higher on one side, a halter neck and arm ruffles. It was deep red and black. When we had arrived at the hotel party people had commented and called her Senorita. It was made for dancing and it showed enough of one leg to drive me crazy. She had fantastic legs. I caressed her knee under the table trying to show my appreciation that she had, reluctantly at first, worn the lingerie I had picked out for her birthday. At first she called me an Indian giver, a gift more for myself, but when I saw her from the bathroom tonight, her curvaceous reflection in the mirror, squeezing into the Wonderbra in black nylon stockings with red heels, seams and tips with lacy garter and panties I wanted to stay in and not go down to the party.
'That girl is probably a hired hooker. I mean, come on!' I tried to reason with her, digging myself deeper.
'Well you made me look like a fool', she said pushing my hand away. She looked away in disgust and took a sip of white wine. Suddenly the girl appeared at our table side.
'Hi there,' she beamed, 'I'm Cherise'. She put her hand out and I shook it limply.
'Peter, and this is my wife Angela.'
'Hello Angela', she said in her deepest warm accent, nice to meet you.
'Nice to meet you too Cherise,' my wife said and got up and walked away.
Cherise looked at me in despair. 'Don't worry, we had a fight. She's angry with me.' My eyes lost my wife as she disappeared across the room.
'Awww, I'm so sorry. I shouldn't have come.' She looked mortified, and very cute at the same time.
'No it's not your fault. Don't worry.' Her arm was on my arm. She gave me a reassured look of OK? Yes, I was.
'I better go after her.'
'Ok, try to have a good time honey.' And she moved a little closer, 'and if things don't work out you can come and find me.' Her tone had changed her mouth was almost pouting, she was electricity, my eyes moved down her body, her low cut dress revealing cleavage, her hand resting on the top just below her collar bone twirled her blonde ringlets to those legs, as shiny and glossy as her lips, perfect right down to her shiny black stilettos. She was perfection and I took a photograph in my mind.
'Thank you,' I said a little dazed I walked away leaving her stood there.
I could have gone with Cherise there and then and not thought twice, but I did. Now I couldn't see my wife anywhere. I tried the bar. I was so angry with her now for leaving me. Cherise had been so nice to her. When I went out to the balcony Angela was there with a man, leaning out over the edge side by side. He was pointing out in the distance and she was looking at him as if the sun shone out of his... I stopped a moment to admire her from behind, her black dress with red frills around the hem and the low back. Her silky black hair tied up high on her head. Her shapely legs looked so sexy in black stockings with the red seam running up the back. She stood on her toes to see further and the red Cuban heel of the nylon could be seen as her foot lifted out of the black high heeled pumps. She was definitely a world apart.
'Hi', as I approached them.
'Hey' she turned, instantly dropping her smile. 'Carlos, this is my husband.'
'Ah yes, Peter. Hello.' They had been talking about me.
My wife looked angry and a little schozzled. She was drinking champagne now. I saw Carlos' glass on the balcony untouched.