G'day everyone,
Here's another offering. I've taken another well worn plot and hopefully given it a bit of a different slant. I guess you'll be the judge of that.
I was originally going to split it in two but decided to post it all together. At various points of the story the narrator changes so I've signposted these by putting the character's name in at the appropriate breaks.
Thanks once again to Capt Obvious for his help editing.
Be sure to let me know what you think.
Cheers
CharlieB4
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The Gambler.
Part One.
Jeremy
I should have left work when everybody else did. I knew they were looking for me. Fucking Bronco's! Who gives up a twelve point lead with five to go. The calls had been coming to my phone all day. I just let them go to message bank. I'd stayed behind to talk to my boss in private. It had been a long shot but he wasn't going to give me a Christmas bonus early.
I didn't see them. I was reaching out for the car door when the bat smashed into my forearm. Both bones snapped and I crumpled to the concrete screaming. Instinctively I tucked myself into a ball as the bat came down again on my side smashing into my ribs.
"Where the fuck you been Jeremy?" The bat came down again. "We've been calling you all day."
Again the bat thundered into my thigh.
"Well? You got an answer? Or do we have to hit you some more?
I rolled back a little and peeked out under my arm. The bat wasn't raised so I lowered my arm and looked at my attackers. There were two, a tall guy in a leather coat was the talker. Beside him a shorter more thick set guy. His clothes bulged around his biceps and chest. He had the bat.
"A..a..at work guys, that's all." I stuttered.
"Why didn't you answer your phone? Mr. D he gets pissed when degenerates who can't pay their debts don't answer the phone."
"My mobiles broken, I left it at a shop to get the screen fixed today." I lied.
Tall guy reached into his pocket and pulled out his mobile. His thumb moved across the screen and then my phone buzzed in my discarded briefcase.
"Well, what the fuck's that?" He asked aggressively kicking my case towards me.
"I just picked it up," I explained.
The tall guy sighed and nodded to his shorter companion and the bat went up again.
Four more blows rained down on me. The first two hit my legs, the third my back causing me to straighten exposing the back of my head. He took the opportunity and hit my head so my vision wavered.
"Jeremy? Jeremy?" a voice called through the fog. A hand grabbed my coat and rolled me onto my back. "You gonna lie to me again Jeremy?"
My vision cleared and the tall guy was squatting down next to me. I shook my head signaling no and immediately regretted it as saw double again.
"Good boy Jeremy. We don't want to hurt you. You're to valuable alive. Mr. D just needs some money man. You are in deep now and he needs to know you can start paying some back."
"Okay," I muttered with my eyes closed.
"That's a boy Jeremy. I told Mr. D, you don't have to worry about Jeremy. He's good for it. Didn't I Omar?"
Bat boy grunted his agreement.
"Now Jeremy, how much you got on you right now?"
"Couple of hundred." I mumbled and then screamed again as tall guy grabbed my broken forearm and squeezed it.
"That's not enough J, you are in the hole for close to fifty large. We go back to Mr. D with a couple of hundred he'll put us in a hole."
"I'll get more, I'll get more," I squealed and he released my arm. "I just need a couple of days."
The pain came back and I screamed louder than before as he squeezed and twisted my broken appendage. I could feel the broken bones rubbing against each other.
"You are out of time Jeremy. I'm sorry man, Mr. D he wants five grand tonight otherwise..." He left the consequences to my imagination.
Just then a new voice called out.
"Heh? You two?" What are you doing there?" It was my boss Mr. Cooper.
"You stay away old man," tall guy warned. "We just got some business with your boy here."
I could hear footsteps as Mr. Cooper got closer.
"Jesus, Jeremy! Is that you?"
"Butt out old man or you'll end up down there with him." Tall guy cautioned him again.
"What's this about?"
Tall guy sighed realizing Mr. Cooper wasn't taking any notice.
"Your boy has a problem. He couldn't pick the winner of a one horse race. My employer has asked me to enquire as to when he is going to settle up his debts."
"So that's why you wanted your Christmas bonus early?" Mr. Cooper said sternly.
I chanced a glance in his direction. He was about ten metres from Omar who was facing him and twirling his bat menacingly.
"Do as they say Mr. Cooper. I don't want you getting hurt." I replied resigned to my fate.
Mr. Cooper ignored me.
"How much do you want?" He asked the tall guy.
"Five grand."
"Well I sure we can sort something out. Come back tomorrow and..." Tall guy cut him off.
"That's five grand tonight, he owes over forty."