I really appreciated the constructive critism given, and going into this chapter I have tried to observe and follow the advice given - see what you think!
...He looks at her lovely brown ass, and, readying his hungry dick for a hard plunge, slides his still hard cock between her soft thighs. He dives deep into Nana's still convulsing pussy. In this position her velvet passage feels even tighter and the soft lips massage his dick as he fucks her with long, hard strokes. Nana moans softly enjoying the feel of his dick in her.
"This feels so good, you have such an amazing body, " Bob groans in pleasure.
He spreads her round ass cheeks and plunges even deeper. The sight of his dick disappearing into her wet pussy makes the intensity build again and he desperately tries to keep the leisurely pace, but his balls are burning. Nana's previous tormenting of his shaft, her grinding on his pubic bone and balls was intense, but he was not ready to cum just yet; he wanted to explore her beautiful brown body.
But now his balls need the release: he starts to pump harder, burying his long dick so far inside Nana's body, she feels like he is fucking her brain. His need to plunge deeper makes him grab her hips, lifts them up, pulling her ass cheeks even further apart, so he can plunge uninhibited into her open body. He watches his dick disappear into her exposed love hole - it's driving him crazy; he smacks her brown ass hard.
Bob is like a wild animal trying to escape from a cage, he is groaning, moaning, shouting profanities and smacking her ass, as he continues to mercilessly fuck Nana's tight pussy. His balls are slapping against her clit and she feels the shockwaves building up in her.
Nana's never been taken so forcefully, so roughly, this was always just an unachieved fetish. Now being fucked hard from behind and smacked is getting her fully aroused; she starts to groan and moan as loudly as Bob.
She has also never cursed in her adult life, but then again she's never ever experienced such wild, animalistic, raw sex before.
They are both caught up in the heat - moaning, groaning and shouting profanities together.
Nana is convulsing, as her orgasm rocks her inner being and her pussy squeezes the dick inside it hard, trying to milk it dry. This causes Bob to release his hot torrent of cum into her eager pussy causing a further, bigger explosion deep inside her. Amazingly, Bob continues to fuck at an astonishing pace and force, and it takes many more pussy punishing thrusts before he slows down and their furious cumming stops.
They are both spent, and his dick begins to soften inside Nana. Bob feels his body go weak and lowers himself on top of her. He uses one hand to spread the brown cheeks that have encased his dick. He pulls free and his flaccid dick pops out of the very wet, well fucked pussy, coated and attached to a thick strand of their love juices. He drops to his back.
They lie together, panting hard and glistening with sweat.
After some very quiet moments:
"Woooooooo! - that was crazy - mad, I have never felt so free to just be myself," Bob declares between breaths.
Trying to recover from that hot session, Nana rubs her brown ass a little ruefully - Bob's spanking had left her sore.
"Me neither," Nana confesses still astonished by the words she had heard flowing from her mouth.
"As for you - you curse like a drunken sailor," he teases the already blushing Nana.
"I did not realise I still knew curse words, if my mother had heard me, she would have put me across her lap and spanked me," she says still shocked at herself and the words that she had shouted.
"Since mummy is not here now, I'll just have to keep doing it for her," Bob offers suggestively - and smacks her sharply on her ass again.
Nana shouts out an exaggerated "Ouch" then turning on her back, she rubs her sore nipples and adds. "I already have sore nipples and you just added a sore ass," she protests playfully.
Bob draws closer and starts licking the sore nipples, making Nana wriggle on the bed in both pleasure and pain, getting wet and turned on all over again. Bob stops and Nana's eyes fly open, she is ready to scold him but relents when she sees the look on his face.
"Oooooh, shit - I need to pee - badly. And I need water even more," he says regretfully.
He falls back onto the mattress, then looks towards Nana.
"You need anything?" he asks helpfully.
"An iceberg," Nana answers opening her legs wide and fanning her pussy with her hand to cool it down.
Bob laughs lazily but does not move, he runs his hands through his hair, then over his face, before laboriously swinging one foot off the bed, then the another. He raises his body and sits for a few minutes with his eyes closed on the edge of the bed.
A movement at the door catches his attention.
Leaning heavily on the door post with her mouth wide open is a beautiful, tall, blonde woman. She has messed up hair, sexy lingerie and an open coat that looks like it was thrown over her shoulders in a rush. She looks disheveled like she has been manhandled.
"Hi, you must be from the agency," Bob says casually as he looks at the woman.
"Yes - I am Katrina" she replies still standing in the doorway looking from Bob to Nana in disbelief.
"I went to the wrong house - it wasn't 306," she adds defensively.
She seems to be in shock and Bob wonders how long she has been watching.
Nana sits up looking at the woman before her. "How could Bob have thought that she was from that agency? This woman is stunning," she thinks to herself as she sizes Katrina up.
"Oh, you mean you went to Tom Colins? Colins with one L, house 309 with a precariously hanging upside down 9?" He looks at Katrina for confirmation.
Katrina has been nodding her head in agreement as he was speaking.
"Mine is house 306 with the 6 firmly stuck. Many people confuse our houses, and we seem to use similar agencies for a lot of things," he adds nonchalantly.