This is my first story, ever, and so I thought that before I got any further that I would post some of the beginning to see what you all thought of it. So please, leave me any positive and/or negative feedback. What I want most is to have some constructive criticism... please? Let me know how to improve my writing, and the story. : )
If I do get enough positive feedback I'll post the rest of the first chapter, and then continue writing the story!
The basic plot of the story is these two friends (Ryan and the narrator) who end up realizing that they feel something more for each other what they expected, and they find out during an unpredictable time. They also take the time to act on these newfound feelings later on in the story. There is plenty more to plot... but this is all that I wish to share with you...
All characters in this story are over the age of 18, and are not related to any real persons in any way. :)
Enjoy!
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Chapter 01
So let me start this story off by sharing a little bit about myself. I am an 18 year old male who will be graduating from our high school this year. I am around six foot one. I participate in some summer sports, so I am slightly in shape. My best friend is Ryan, who is around five foot one, and is the same age as I am.
He usually dresses nicely, he tries putting on a good image for everybody each day at school. Nice pants, a nice button down shirt, clean shoes, socks, he would do his hair.... The works. Even though he dressed so nicely, we all knew about his love for games. Mostly computer games that is. I enjoyed them too too, I play on my laptop with him while he would be on his. It was a great way to kill time and avoid homework!
I usually dressed pretty nice too, but not quite as impressive as Ryan did. I would normally wear a nice pair of pants, my normal shoes, and whatever shirt I could find. I would wear my black ski-jacket on top of those to keep myself more warm.
My story starts off at the end of one day in school. I went through my day like normal, I woke up and made my way to school, just barely making it on time as usual. Normally I would go to the school café and hang out with Ryan before, grab a bagel and some Orange juice and then take it with me to my next class. So I decided that if I hurried I might be able to say hi, get my food, and make it to class on time.
"Hey dude! Did you sleep in again? I tried to call you to wake you up..." was Ryans greeting when I came in the door and went to order my food.
"Uh yea... sorry. I told you I keep my phone on silent over the night so I can actually get some sleep." I said back, laughing a little bit. "Can I have the usual please Cindy?" Cindy was the lady who worked at the Café, and I went there often enough for her to know what I normally ordered.
She handed over a bagel and a tall glass of orange juice before I had the chance to turn around to sit down.
"Here you are! Sorry you didn't have to wait so long, I figured you were late for school, so I went ahead and made it for you before you got here. Its going to cost you the usual dollar-fifty though, if you wouldn't mind." She smirked, and I laughed a little bit, and handed over the money, and thanked her before going back over to Ryan.
"Well, you ready to head to class?"
"Uh, sure, just let me get my backpack.... Dude, you aren't supposed to have that much cream cheese! Its not a cream cheese sandwich, it's a bagel for goodness sake!" Ryan said, chuckling slightly at my bagel with what he always said has too much cream cheese. I laughed, and just walked in front of him out the door into the main building of the school and started to head towards my class.
Ryan caught up with me and did his usual shoving me into a locker or something along those lines. "So I'll see you at lunch?"
"Yea, do you want to eat school food, or go out for food somewhere? I don't have a lot of money, but if you pitched in we can go."
He took a moment to think this over, and then smiled. "Lets eat here, I don't feel like dishing up money for fast food today. I'll stick with my meal tickets."