Just a quick note to explain some things about this submission. This story is a long one, and I'm currently writing the next few pages. So apologies, but there's no sex in this one! I'm using the first couple of pages to build up a bit of tension between the characters. I promise I'll do my utmost to make it worth the wait though. In addition, any constructive feedback will be much appreciated.
Many thanks, and I hope you enjoy my work!
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Entering the dim bar situated on the edge of town, I briefly considered walking back out. It was a single room, dark, dingy, with a low ceiling and a seemingly permanent haze of stale cigarette smoke. Definitely not my kind of place. I'm not a twin set and skirts kind of girl, don't get me wrong. In fact, I was wearing faded black jeans, heavy boots and a white t-shirt. I mentally berated myself for leaving my jacket at home, and feeling like I could use an extra layer of protection from the Neanderthals in here, I glanced to my left. A group of big, rough bikers congregated around a pool table, obviously belonging to the Harleys propped outside the door. With hardly an inch of tattoo - free skin between them, and a lot of hair, I was feeling more than a little scared. Especially when one of them licked his lips lasciviously at me. Extending the middle finger of my left hand towards them, causing them to collapse in raucous laughter, I walked purposefully to the bar, and propped myself on a stool.
Leaning my arms carefully on the edge of the sticky bar, I glanced at the bartender, who was absentmindedly...polishing...a glass with a filthy cloth. Ordering a beer, without the glass, I scanned the right hand side of the bar. Crowded in that end of the long narrow bar were a couple of tables, and a tiny gas fire that looked like it hadn't been updated since the swinging sixties. There was a guy sat at a table by the high grimy windows who caught my attention. From what I could see, he wore a battered leather jacket, and clutched a double whisky in his right hand. His left was dexterously twirling a silver ring around his index finger.
Averting my attention, I could barely make out my reflection in the dirty promotional mirror behind the shelf of dusty bottles of spirits. Long black hair framed my face, overly large blue eyes and a wide mouth detracting from a face that could have been pretty if it wasn't for that. Lifting the cool bottle to my forehead, I was surprised to find tears brimming in my eyes as my thoughts turned to Tommy. Ah, Tommy. A six foot linebacker, sandy blonde hair, and a body worth dying for. He had been attentive at first, winning me over with a kiss. Then I heard rumours that he had told practically everyone in the town I was crap in bed. And used that to justify cheating on me with Shelly, the buxom blond airhead. As far as I was concerned, they deserved each other.
Feeling eyes on my back, I turned my head slightly. The guy in the jacket seemed to be watching me, but as I turned he looked away. I wasn't in the mood for flirting after being dumped for a skinny cheerleader anyway. But still, I felt the pull of this guy, as if he was sensing me, rather than blatantly checking me out. Returning to my beer, I wallowed in my own misery for a further ten minutes, before the door crashed open, rousing me from my reverie. Three heavily built young men entered the room.
"Well, lookie here boys!" came a loud, booming voice. "A piece of ass, all for us!"
"Breathe the other way Tommy, your bleaching my hair. Or better still, just stop breathing." I coolly responded, watching his face turn an unflattering shade of red.
"Fucking bitch!" he spat, grabbing my wrist and yanking me off the barstool causing it to clatter to the scarred hardwood floor.