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Thickfinger
I knew that I had to have her the moment I spotted her across the open sun dappled meadow. The noise of the tires from my car crunching over the gravel had me praying silently that it would not send her fleeing. I pulled the car to the roadside, closed the door quietly and crouched behind the fender. Without drawing her attention, my mind assessed the possibilities of getting closer. The complete lack of cover left a stealthy approach out of the question. There was nothing left for me to do but rely on sheer speed to close the distance between us. When I arrived at the point where I had seen her sleek figure frolicking among the wildflowers, she had vanished. The only proof that she ever existed anywhere outside of my mind was a small wicker basket and a rumpled blanket.
Driven by something that could not be readily identified, only a trail of footprints were all that I had to guide me in my search for her. Could it be the biological imperative? That didn’t feel right to me as I considered it further and followed the meager evidence of her passing. Unable to shake the feeling that I somehow knew who she was; it was unclear to me as to whether we had ever even met.
Passing into the forest, I scanned for any sign of movement but found nothing amiss. My senses focused on the narrow path before me. Not wanting to frighten my quarry and drive her ever deeper into the wooded hills, I proceeded as quietly as possible. Coming to a small stream, the bits of earth and scraped moss marking each stone made me certain that this was where she had crossed. Peering further along the trail on the far bank, I noticed something out of place where the terrain began a gentle ascent.
Leaping across the churning water and landing short, my now soaked, freezing feet were of no concern to me. All that mattered was the chase! My steps were louder than I would have liked, thudding across the bare ground to what I had seen from the stream’s now distant edge. Hopelessly entangled in a thorn bush were the remnants of her tattered black dress.
I snatched it from the greedy limbs of the branches, the fabric slick and warm against my rough fingers. It was possible to inhale her perfume still clinging to it as I buried my nose into its folds. The complex fragrance of sweat and musk further fueled my desire to gain the upper hand and find my nimble wood nymph.
Turning to follow what had seemed like a flash of movement near the crest of the hill, I cast the now useless garment aside. Was that a shapely thigh in a shimmering black stocking or was my imagination playing a trick on me? Uncertain, I moved on carefully and watched for the slightest sign of her.
It was easy to see far into the distance where the trail split in two from the apex of the small hill. My frequent forays into this part of the woods on fall afternoons would now serve me well because I knew as to where each path led. To the right, the trail became a marshy quagmire where it passed too near the lakeshore. The left side curled lazily along the hillside before winding through rocky bluffs that enveloped the still waters from above. I moved stealthily, examining them both for any telltale signs of disturbance.
Advancing quietly, it was obvious to me where her foot had slipped. As she had attempted to slow her descent, the leaves had been turned wet side up marking the event. A freshly broken twig not far down the track leading to the left showed its bright inner bark, a perfect sign of her choice. ‘Could this be too obvious?’ I asked myself. Attempting to restore order to the whirling doubts in my mind, all I could do was to stand panting at the juncture of the wooded tracks.
A wrong decision on my part here would, without a doubt, afford her the necessary time to escape. Checking further down the right trail for any signs of disturbance or possible deception had me certain as to what course she had taken. I recalled an intersecting game trail used only by the craftiest of beasts and turning on my heels, pelted the way I had come, back up the hill.
My body had become soft and I railed inwardly at myself. That didn’t deter me from surging through the impassable undergrowth to finally emerge onto the spindly trace. I stopped for a moment to catch my breath, not entirely confident that acting decisively a few moments ago would place me ahead of her. She had proven without question that she could outdistance me. My only hope was to use my intimate knowledge of this forest and a bit of guile to end this pursuit in my favor.
I arrived where the trails met and inspected the larger for any signs that my arrival was to late. Relieved to find that wasn’t the case, I quietly climbed to a perch on a jagged outcropping high enough to observe her approach and settled in to wait. It felt good to allow my body to recover from its exertions and have a few moments to finalize my plan.
The sweat from my brow was stinging the scratches from my headlong plunge through the thick brush. I feverishly wiped it away, surveying the location. It was pleasing to find that it was perfectly suited for the ambush which was forming in my mind. Anything entering the small clearing at the base of the bluffs would have already passed the only exit immediately beneath the craggy wall which concealed my presence. Once she was beyond me, I planned to place myself where the trail veered around the cliff. It would effectively seal her inside the stony embrace of the towering granite.
All external noises were replaced by the thunderous pounding of my heart the instant I saw her approaching. Watching intently, a smile curled at the corners of my mouth. Furtively glancing back the way she had come and continuing into the clearing, she did not yet realize that her peril no longer emanated from behind. Leaning against the rock face, she began a frantic search for a route out of the exposed clearing. Her outstretched hands which were gliding along the sun-warmed rock sought purchase to begin a harrowing climb.
I sprang from my hidden redoubt, landing in a crouch where the trails intersected, cutting off her only hope of escape. My sudden appearance at the mouth of the clearing made her spin away from the cliff to retreat deeper into the arms of the bluff. I closed the distance between us, not taking my eyes off her for a second. Just moments before, I had seen only vulnerability and fear, but now her pretty face had suddenly hardened into a scowl of pure defiance.