Erotic Writing Course First Submission by Mr. L. C. WalsheEWC 1501
Introduction
This piece was originally conceived as a stand-alone short story until it struck me that a hotel was a perfect setting for an erotic portmanteau novel. Lots of permutations of sexual behaviour behind closed bedroom doors; lots of secret illicit liaisons, private sex orgies, visits from prostitutes, fornication in the hotel sauna etc all loosely linked together by the staff and the hotel. The possibilities are endless. It is not an original idea I know. There was a TV series some years ago and Arnold Bennet wrote a novel called Imperial Palace. Can you confirm that there is no copy-write problem in using a hotel in the manner I have described? One further general enquiry, you state in chapter 8 that incest is taboo. I assume that it is OK so long as it isn't consanguineous? Presumably it's acceptable in erotic fiction for fathers to fuck their sons' girlfriends and wives and for mothers to sleep with their sons-in-law or even their daughters-in-law?
I offer The Human Touch as a chapter, not necessarily the first chapter, of my erotic novella. One of my worst faults, I know, is too much telling and not enough showing. Far too much of 'and then...and then...and then...' etc. Does characterization matter very much in bonking books? I feel that Jane and Stan are just ciphers in my story. Do I need to flesh them out? Their souls, I mean not their bodies! I also find it difficult to get the right balance of outright obscenity and erotic understatement.
The Human Touch
Jane glanced with approval at her reflection in the full length mirrors in reception. Nothing distracted from the shapely contours of her beautiful body as she never wore underwear when she was on duty. She shimmied across the dining room, her magnificent breasts gently undulating, conscious of the many admiring male glances. She reveled in her sexual allure and the thought of all the men who were mentally fucking her. Then she noted with irritation that Arthur was the duty manager. She watched him as he surveyed his empire, his eyes flicking quickly from table to table, pausing occasionally to register a particularly attractive woman. He liked to grade women on a scale of 1 -- 10 depending on how much he would like to shag them; Jane was right off the scale in his book. She was aware of his reputation as a womaniser and found him repellant but, being a newcomer, she had no desire to create waves and resolved to keep out of his way.
Later, when the diners had departed, she would hold court behind her bar. She was in her late thirties with an unmistakable sexual allure which men immediately responded to. She had mastered the barmaid's art of flirting with her customers while staying entirely detached. They were mostly businessmen, diligently attending to the affairs of their employers. She laughed politely at their risquΓ© jokes and in between the banter and sexual innuendo she admired photographs of their wives and children and was privy to their thoughts about what was in the news. They rarely stayed late; they had reports to write and plans to make for the following day.
A playful tweak at the zip of her skirt announced the arrival of Arthur behind the bar clearly intent on groping her if he got half a chance. He noticed the bare flesh beneath her zip and immediately guessed that she wasn't wearing knickers.
'Oh yes, that's very nice' he whispered in her ear.
Standing behind her and out of view of the customers he slid her skirt up her thighs and gently brushed against her naked pudenda.
'Clean shaven too! What more could a man want.'
Jane quickly broke away from his prying fingers and smoothed down her skirt.
'I'll just go and see if Stan wants another drink.'
Stan was the resident pianist playing gentle inconsequential music for the hotel's clientele. He was blind, although hardly anyone ever noticed. Jane loved to watch his hands caressing the keyboard; he had such beautiful sensitive hands with long flexible fingers. She lingered to chat, waiting for the intruder behind her bar to leave. Stan sensed her irritation and laughed when she told him about Arthur and his roving hands. Jane was accustomed to men admiring her body indeed she would have been mortified if she had passed unnoticed; but she drew the line at being groped by a fat sweaty middle-aged man who was probably a 'ten second fucker'.
For most of her customers it was all just a game of course. They looked into her cleavage and indulged in fleeting sexual fantasies before departing to telephone their wives. No doubt when they undressed in their lonely bedrooms she would frequently be the object of their masturbatory fantasies; and significant amounts of semen must have been ejaculated nightly in mirrored bathrooms throughout the hotel in homage to her body.
But Stan couldn't admire her breasts or observe the delightful way her hips moved when she walked; he was totally in the dark. Jane pondered the cruel impoverishment of his life and wondered what his perception of her was. He had to rely entirely on sound, scent and touch. Most people judge each other initially on appearance and without the initial eye contact the prelude to intimacy was missing. How did a sightless man keep in touch with the world? It must be incredibly lonely in the dark.
Actually, Jane was under a bit of a misapprehension regarding Stan. His fellow musicians on string bass and drums kept him fully informed about all the more desirable women who came into the dining room and Jane had been the subject of many detailed and extremely obscene eulogies. In his minds eye he could already see her; he just needed to get his hands on her to appreciate the finer details. She down sat on a stool beside him. He heard a faint whisper of nylon as she crossed her legs. Casually he let his hand brush against her exposed thighs. His sensitive fingers immediately surmised that she was wearing fifteen denier black stockings. The minute temperature increase of a 'black body' and the perceptible twin tension areas clearly indicated fine black stockings held up by suspenders. As with most men, his cultural horizon commenced at a woman's stocking tops and proceeded upwards to her cunt, arse and tits before terminating at her lips.
'Never mind my dear you can always rely on us to take care of you.'
Stan gently stroked her thigh. Jane glanced round the dining room to make sure they were unobserved and made no effort to stop him. .
'You'r wearing black stockings and suspenders aren't you?' Stan asked.
'Why don't you find out for yourself?'
Stan's refined fingers slid slowly up her thigh, paused briefly at her stocking tops before continuing their advance. Soon he was able to confirm the Duty manager's hypothesis; Jane's pudenda was silky smooth and unguarded by panties. He gently probed and immediately felt her sexual wetness. Jane quivered with a frisson of pleasure.
'How did you know they were black? Oh of course; the other guys told you.'
Jane decided it was time to go now that she had made Stan unmistakably aware of her availability.
'Just imagine fucking that!' said Harry addressing the other two members of the band as she sashayed her way back to the bar.
'I intend to', said Stan, 'I'll tell you all about it tomorrow but don't hang about when we finish tonight; just tell the night porter I'll give him a bottle of scotch, he'll know what to do.'
Back behind her bar, Jane's performance was not up to her usual standard. Her mind was absorbed with the arousing thought of having her naked body fondled intimately by a blind man of having its intimate secrets exposed to his tactile examination; a kind of Braille pornography. She took a tissue from her handbag and discretely mopped the sexual juices that were flowing out of her quim; not wearing knickers could be a problem sometimes.
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Well before midnight the last of the drinkers had left the bar and the hotel was beginning to close down for the night. Stan remained seated at his piano; his taxi wasn't due for half an hour. The lounge was deserted when Jane strolled over for another chat with Stan.
'So how's the lovely lady who doesn't wear knickers?'
'Well you ought to know; you stuck your fingers in my pie didn't you. I'm not wearing a bra either.'
Stan gently poked her breast then squeezed it.
'Nice tits! Are you going to get them out for me?'
'What, here on the bandstand in the dining room? I don't think management policy runs to life sex shows. We could go to my room'
'No too risky, we'd get fired if we were discovered.'