You've written this really nifty and/or hot story that you want to see posted on the Literotica story site but you're fairly new to this, and you haven't been able to get anyone on Literotica to read it and give advice on making it the best story on the site. What do you do?
First, it doesn't have to be the best written or polished story on the site. Readers here are forgiving; most of them primarily want a fresh perspective of arousing heat. This isn't the
New Yorker
you are writing for. Readers here will tolerate a few typos and missing commas; indeed, perfect copy is almost unattainable even after a competent editor has worked with a story—and you can't count of finding a competent editor on this Web site anyway. Just about anyone with (or without) any degree of training and skill can—and does—volunteer to provide editorial help here.
Second, just waiting around forever for someone to say she/he will "edit" the story for you isn't going to get you or your potential readers anywhere either—you should be moving on to your next story idea and developing your storytelling skills by "just doing it."
You can go with just trying to make the story the best it can be; review it very carefully yourself, using techniques this essay discusses; go ahead and post it; and adjust it later as the necessity/mood strikes you—you can replace a story here later after making changes to it (read the FAQs on the submissions page for instructions on doing that).
What you can read here are a few ideas—not exhaustive, by any means—on toning up your stories by yourself. This essay covers what self-review is (and isn't) for Literotica stories, how you can do it, and what to look for while you are doing it. At the end of the essay are pointers to some resources on this topic that you can track down yourself if you want to study the question in greater depth or suspect I don't know what I'm talking about.
What Is Self-Review?
First, what self-review isn't. It isn't self-editing (despite the title of one of the resource books listed below). It's impossible for a writer to "edit" him/herself. Only someone else looking afresh at what was written without the preconceived notions of what the writer thought had been written can see some of the grammar, punctuation, and spelling mistakes; inconsistencies; and incomplete connections in a work. The writer will read right through a lot of these because her/his mind is absorbed by what she/he thought was written rather than what actually was spun out on the page. And beyond this, all writers have habitual mistakes they make, and if they made them in the first place, chances are very good they will make them again and never see them on a reread.
What the writer is actually doing when going back through a manuscript to polish it up and correct mistakes is review—"self-review."
And this is something every writer should do even if the work is going to be edited by someone else. The better shape the writer can get the story into him/herself, the fewer mistakes there will be to bog an editor or backup reader down and distract them from seeing other, often more deeply rooted problems in the manuscript.
How Do You Do It?
You can catch many of your own mistakes and polish up your work yourself simply by reading it over again a few times, each time looking at it from a different aspect or for a different issue, before dumping it into the submissions queue at Literotica. First, it may not be a good idea to go over it endlessly, because what you may be beating out of it is its freshness and unique and compelling voice.
But you can improve your story a lot by submitting it to three basic read-throughs. Read through it again right after you've written it. You can catch a lot of the surface, glaring structural and presentation mistakes right off the bat. Then read it through out loud; you'd be amazed at how many mistakes pop out when you vocalize them that where hidden when everything was still internalized in your brain, where often you just haven't tapped into the file what your brain was thinking. Now, resist the urge to rush your masterpiece to the readers. Put the work aside for a few days and then come back and read it again, this time as much for context as for structure and presentation. You've now knocked out of the brain what it chose initially to see that may not really be there—or make not be there correctly. If there are significant contextual, structural, and/or presentation problems, chances are good you will catch the worst of them at this point.
And, by all means, consult resources when you are doing these reads. Yes, put the work through the computer program spell check; just don't expect the spell check's idea of what is wrong or right to be correct. It will, however, pick up a lot of errors that both you and the spell check can agree were typos or errors you just didn't see until you were focused directly on them.
More important, at least have a dictionary at your side (or on your computer desktop) while you read and recheck not just the words that look funny to you but also words you don't use all that often. Recheck to at least one level deeper than you think is really necessary. U.S. publishing mostly uses
Webster's Collegiate Dictionary
for spelling and hyphenation. And it uses the
Chicago Manual of Style
for published fiction. But any basic grammar and punctuation book would also be useful to use during your self-review. The
American Heritage Book of English Usage
and Theodore M. Bernstein's
The Careful Writer
are both excellent, easy-to-understand and use writer's aids for writing short stories.
Other techniques are frequently offered on review techniques, like reading the whole story backwards by phrase or word to help you catch spelling mistakes or scanning through the work looking for certain classifications of habitual problems only (e.g., you/you're and its/it's renderings or overuse of certain words or types of words, like adverbs). On this, though, I counsel the "don't beat all of the life out of it" advice given above. And, again, keep in mind that Literotica isn't the
New Yorker
. This is supposed to be fun for you, and the reader will tolerate a little lack of polish in a story as long as it delivers on what they came here for—either arousing or other forms of entertainment.
What Do You Look For?
When you review your story, start with the simple and the obvious, the structural and presentation issues, and work toward the complex, the context. Typically, you won't be able to see contextual problems as long as you are distracted by the more obvious, simpler problems.
Structurally
, first look to your paragraphing. Unlike print media, reading on the computer screen requires short paragraphs and plenty of white space. Keep your paragraphs to not much more than ten lines of text and put an extra line return between them. Simply scanning through what you've written will show whether you've done this. The dialogue paragraphs should be set apart, with dialogue passages by different characters in separate paragraphs. And the Literotica editing process seems to prefer American style over UK style, so use double quotes at the first level always and see that those periods and commas and most of the question marks are tucked inside the quote marks. Do all of your paragraphs end with some type of end punctuation? If you use italics, have you done so sparingly?
In a closer look at the story, try to make sure that the
presentation
issues—the grammar, punctuation, capitalization, and spelling—aren't going to distract the reader's attention. Grammar is rough to clean up through self-review, because if you made the mistake to begin with, it's likely a mistake you habitually make and won't see in review. But you can look for subject/verb agreement (singular/plural) and you can try to make sure that sentences have a subject and verb (unless you don't intend them to; in fiction, it's quite all right to have incomplete sentences, as long as you know how to do this to good effect—and not do it all that often). You can also try to make sure that a clause modifying a noun is hung on the noun it actually modifies. (e.g., "I gave my hat, which was red, to you" rather than "I gave my hat to you, which was red").
Try to be consistent in capitalization—and don't try to capitalize every noun in sight; this is a Germanic influence that current English abhors and that can be very distracting to the reader.
And, speaking of "sight," look for those misused homonyms: sight/site/cite, for instance. Mistakes in this category most often seen in Literotica story copy include you're/your, its/it's, here/hear, their/there, and then/than.
